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Magical Moment (Challenge from Saxoness)

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Echo Rhayne
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0 posted 01-22-2000 07:20 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Time seemed to stop
not a sound could be heard.
My heart stopped it's beating
no one uttered a word.

Chills coursed through my body.
I stood with delight.
Tears flooded my eyes.
The darkness seemed bright.

His feeble little fingers
wrapped around my single one.
I snapped back to reality
and got the fetal surgery done.

That moment was so magical
that I never will forget,
the way he held my finger tight
the instant that we met.


OK I want to give you the gist of the challenge so you can understand it better....
"Recently I recieved an email from my sister that included a mind blowing picture. It was a story about a pregnant mother who's child had spina bifida. The child would die unless he recieved a new type of surgery in which the doctor would operate while he was still inside the womb. Well, the doctor performed a C-section and made a small incision in the womb...and right before he began to operate...that small 21 week old baby stuck his perfectly formed hand out and grasped the doctors finger. A picture was taken at that moment...and it came out perfectly clear. It was the most breathtaking thing I've ever seen.
So, Echo, my challenge is to write a poem...from the perspective of the doctor in that very moment. ~Saxoness"




 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~


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SnglDad
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1 posted 01-22-2000 07:36 AM       View Profile for SnglDad   Email SnglDad   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SnglDad

Wow,
You have put the beginning of a life into word`s and in such a way that I`ll never forget this story.
Great Job  
Hope Mom and her child are well?
Thank you for sharing.
God Bless

                            Joel
Paul Hoekman
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2 posted 01-22-2000 07:37 AM       View Profile for Paul Hoekman   Email Paul Hoekman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Paul Hoekman's Home Page   View IP for Paul Hoekman

Extremely well done
and such a neat perspective!

Earthman
Munda
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since 10-08-1999
Posts 3629
The Hague, The Netherlands


3 posted 01-22-2000 07:57 AM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

Echo, you did so well ! Amazing ! !
hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
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Glen Hope, PA USA


4 posted 01-22-2000 09:43 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

I saw that challange Echo and wondered what you'd write...challange well met.
May give this one a shot myself  
Echo Rhayne
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5 posted 01-22-2000 01:59 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Thank you all, this didn't come out like I expected but I think it gets the feelings accrss.

Ruth, I jsut got done reading yours and I must say it is FAR better than mine is!

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~


Denise
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6 posted 01-22-2000 02:03 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is beautiful, too, Melanie! It captures well that magical moment!  

Denise
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7 posted 01-22-2000 02:07 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Echo.... I just read Hoot's .....yours expresses the feeling just as well. Amazing. I enjoyed yours very much!-SEA  
Saxoness
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8 posted 01-22-2000 02:42 PM       View Profile for Saxoness   Email Saxoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saxoness

Wonderful! Reading the poem brought tears to my eyes....as did seeing the picture. Challenge well met, Echo!

 "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot

devina
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9 posted 01-22-2000 07:43 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Beautifuly written, I don't see where it didn't turn out right, I got the feeling before you explained...as always, wonderfully done!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Martie
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10 posted 01-22-2000 08:12 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Beatiful!  How precious life is!
WhtDove
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11 posted 01-22-2000 10:04 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

I missed the challenge, but WOW!!  Excellent job in portraying what happened! Amazing, just amazing!

 <*\\\><
Where there is faith,
there is love.
Where there is love,
there is peace.
Where there is peace,
there is GOD.
Where there is GOD,
there is no need.

Hallmark


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12 posted 01-22-2000 10:34 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

This is really excellent, echo!
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