I'd be a butt if you woke me up in the middle of the night too Lol, sorry (thats only because its rare I sleep)...I like this poem, it says a lot, I think we all need hands to hold us instead of pushing us apart, so very well said.
~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~
Member Rara Avis
Hi, Sea. I enjoyed this poem. One thing, though. I think the poem would be that much better if you really got inside the narrator's head. We know she's sad, but is it only because her significant other is being such a louse? I think it runs deeper than that -- his rejection is just another representation in a line of bad choices. I don't know where I'm getting that feeling from, but it's there. Keep workin' at it.
One Who Understands
Cedar Rapids, Iowa
SEA~~ I do enjoy reading your thoughts However this poem can go both ways... I thought of a man... because when a man needs you it is always when a woman is not available... bad timing as I tell my husband hehe....Again I do enjoy your work very much...
G. A. Webb
Stanton, California, USA