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Stargazer
Junior Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 16
Alvordton, OH USA

0 posted 2000-01-21 11:55 PM


I held your hand
you touched my cheek
I looked in your eyes
my knees went weak

Your skin so soft
your love so sweet
you always knew to
sweep me off my feet

Every carress
is a lullaby
and when they stop
I think I'll die

So break away now
don't prolong the pain
my eyes already
swell with rain

Let daggers strike
and empty my soul
before if fills
and I lose control


 Stargazer


"I wish they would only take me as I am."
-Vincent Van Gogh

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Echo Rhayne
Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
1 posted 2000-01-22 02:03 AM


Beautiful poem, and I welcome you to passions!

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~



~ViXeN~
Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 93
Guelph, Ont. Canada
2 posted 2000-01-22 02:20 AM


very beautiful poem =)
i loved it!!
shannon

bsquirrel
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855

3 posted 2000-01-22 02:31 AM


Yes, welcome. You have tons of potential...

Mike

One Who Understands
Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251
Cedar Rapids, Iowa
4 posted 2000-01-22 03:24 AM


That was excellent

I like how you show with examples of why the pain should end quickly...well done

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
5 posted 2000-01-22 09:25 AM


I really enjoyed this...welcome to passions  
Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

6 posted 2000-01-26 07:11 PM


Wow - this is gently beautiful...

lovely...



 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath

CrazyChick
Member
since 2000-01-05
Posts 132

7 posted 2000-01-26 10:55 PM


Great Work!!!
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