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Open Poetry #5

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Stargazer
Junior Member

since 2000-01-21

Posts 16
Alvordton, OH USA

0 posted 2000-01-21 11:53 PM

I cannot look away
from your sky eyes
like starry nights
and sunny days
and endless ocean waves
enrapturement controls me
I'll obey you
every breath a treasure
for me to lock up and hoarde
for you are MINE
but you own me
and my heart
I cannot control myself
but to love you
and your sweet silken lips
upon my cheek
upon my jaw
upon my neck
though I cry
my tears are diamonds
for you to admire

Stargazer

"I wish they would only take me as I am."
-Vincent Van Gogh

poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite

since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

1 posted 2000-01-22 01:53 AM

This is exquisite! I loved some of the words you used! Beautiful imagery....Made me glad to be in love.....aaahhh.

** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000!

One Who Understands
Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 251
Cedar Rapids, Iowa

2 posted 2000-01-22 03:42 AM

"diamonds for you to admire"
What a beautiful way to express your detication and unconditional love.

Love to see more of your pieces

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

3 posted 2000-01-22 09:32 AM

Oh my, this is wonderful and has a few very ingeniuos lines...well done

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

4 posted 2000-01-22 10:38 AM

I love poems such as this, wanna know why?
Because they are sencere and full of open love and passion.

Love the line about tears being diamonds, too!

Corinne

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

5 posted 2000-01-22 12:58 PM

Beautiful and romantic! Very nice!

Denise

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