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Who`s Outside Your Window?

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SnglDad
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0 posted 01-21-2000 04:29 PM       View Profile for SnglDad   Email SnglDad   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for SnglDad

It`s late at night
And Im all alone,
Who`s outside my window?
Dog`s are barking
And kid`s aren`t home,
Who`s outside my window?
Roof top rumble`s
The back door shake`s,
Who`s outside my window?
Wind`s are howling
A tree limb break`s,
Who`s outside my window?
I look to see
And there he is,
A stranger outside my window,
I try to scream
But there`s no sound,
He`s coming thru my window,
I reach for something
There`s nothing around,
He`s entered thru my window,
With his hand
He take`s my air,
I can no longer see the window.
Mommy,Mommy
A child cries,
I wake and close my window.
Just a dream
No one dies.
WHO`S OUTSIDE YOUR WINDOW??


               SWEET DREAM`S



[This message has been edited by SnglDad (edited 01-23-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Joel - All Rights Reserved
Marilyn
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1 posted 01-21-2000 04:36 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

I am thankful I am not easily frightened. This could make most fearful people's skin crawl. This is all to real a threat in our society. Very cute to add the sweet dreams.
Denise
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2 posted 01-21-2000 04:37 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Well that was one heck of a nightmare! Whew!
Well done, Joel!

Denise
Echo Rhayne
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3 posted 01-21-2000 04:40 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Hmm whose outside my window?  I wish I would have known that answer last night LoL, but thats a different story...shhhhhhhh the secret is aliens....Hmmmm however I wouldnt recommed this poem for the easily frightened, but its great, suspensful!

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~


SnglDad
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4 posted 01-21-2000 05:20 PM       View Profile for SnglDad   Email SnglDad   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SnglDad

Thank you, Marilyn,dsnyder and Echo    
I wish all of you the best on your writings.

Take Care and God Bless.

                             Joel



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5 posted 01-21-2000 10:04 PM       View Profile for A Friend   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Friend

Dad I think this is cool I was going to put
it back up under my name with a different
title,just to see what would happen?
Love you dad and cool poem
Jr.

[This message has been edited by A Friend (edited 01-22-2000).]
simplyYRREHS
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6 posted 01-21-2000 10:18 PM       View Profile for simplyYRREHS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for simplyYRREHS

Joel...

(I am the easily frightened)...but with that aside, I think this is a great poem.  I love the style.  The repetition tends to build the tension with every new thought.  VERY VERY thought provoking...and in today's society, a very serious thing...I will double check the locks tonite!  

Great writing!

Sherry

 "Heaven is under our feet as well as over our heads." ~Henry David Thoreau


SnglDad
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7 posted 01-22-2000 07:06 AM       View Profile for SnglDad   Email SnglDad   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SnglDad

Thank you Sherry. Your replies mean alot to me.
Everyone should alway`s lock up before going to bed.
Thanx again everyone for the kind words.

God Bless
                            
                              Joel
Munda
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8 posted 01-22-2000 08:14 AM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

There's always a little guardian Angel outside my window   Nice poem Joel !
SnglDad
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9 posted 01-22-2000 02:16 PM       View Profile for SnglDad   Email SnglDad   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SnglDad

Thank you for your reply Munda.

                            Joel
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10 posted 01-22-2000 02:28 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

SnglDad.... I try not to think about what's outside my window, but I will now! I liked this.- SEA
SnglDad
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11 posted 01-23-2000 02:31 AM       View Profile for SnglDad   Email SnglDad   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SnglDad

Thank you SEA, Im glad you like this one.
I wasn`t sure what kind of responce I would
get with this one.


                                  Joel
spiked
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12 posted 01-23-2000 02:57 AM       View Profile for spiked   Email spiked   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spiked

Very creative
full of suspense
Thank you

Richard
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13 posted 01-23-2000 06:24 AM       View Profile for Bad Boy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bad Boy

It wasn`t me outside her window.
I was peeping in a different neighborhood.
Good job.


 
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