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0 posted 01-21-2000 12:15 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for SEA


How can I tell you
where do I begin
I miss you
not the walls you hide in

I miss you
But how do I explain
I don't miss the heartache
I don't miss the pain

I don't miss the fighting
or the troubles that we've had
I miss us just being happy
my heart feels sad

I miss the way
we were supposed to be
-us against the world-
not you against me.
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spiked
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1 posted 01-21-2000 12:30 PM       View Profile for spiked   Email spiked   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spiked

I can relate to your poem.
Seems love changes sometimes and we long for what was.
hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 01-21-2000 12:50 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Excellent final stanza
"I miss the way
we were supposed to be
-us against the world-
not you against me."
Like that a lot  

Marilyn
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3 posted 01-21-2000 02:33 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

You know I hate to follow Ruth. she and I are so very much in tune in our thinking. I too love the last stanza. Wonderful piece!  
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4 posted 01-21-2000 04:02 PM       View Profile for One Who Understands   Email One Who Understands   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for One Who Understands

Great poem.  I am always comforted by reading such a soulful pience...thank you
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5 posted 01-21-2000 05:01 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is wonderful, SEA. I'm sure many can relate to this! Well done!

Denise
Corinne
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state of confusion


6 posted 01-21-2000 05:03 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Simply elegant.


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7 posted 01-21-2000 05:07 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

I like that last stanza, too.  I also like the theme, love lost, wondering how things got turned around.  Nice subject.  Great approach.

Marilyn - you gotta be fast if you're gonna beat Hootessa.
 
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