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Don't Ever Forget Her

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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 01-21-2000 02:09 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for wayoutwalt

Yesterdays never clutched in vain
Even in times he canít recall
When last she held him through the rain
And he watched her sweetness fall

Thunder rings off the rippling roof
Wakes baby with souring breath
Her love for baby seems aloof
Since the night of her sudden death

A reflex cry from baby tells
The night that mother is gone
To the rain he would say as well
Take your tears and please move on

Yesterday he might just forgive
For tonight he will only sleep
Sweet dreams for baby, mother lives
And the sadness fairs not to creep

Crash you lightning! Crash you thunder!
Wake the baby this way each night
He should know how life once shunned her
And strive to make her dream his fight

Baby might just want to nestle
Against the cold bars of his bed
But one day he will grow to wrestle
With the grief this night has fed



[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 01-21-2000).]
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1 posted 01-21-2000 02:13 AM       View Profile for One Who Understands   Email One Who Understands   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for One Who Understands

Excellent work
devina
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2 posted 01-21-2000 02:40 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Wow-I'm stunned by the feeling and emotion in this one...HUGS if it is personal, but Damn good poem all the same...Can I say WOW one more time????

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3 posted 01-21-2000 02:54 AM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

I enjoyed this very much. Shouldn't the word vein be vain though? Please don't slap me. LOL! if you meant to do that.   My favorite stanza is the third one.
wayoutwalt
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4 posted 01-21-2000 03:08 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

what temptress yuh didn't get the witty vein vain thing oh come on..hehehe nonono thanx for catching that editing it now i am
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*sniffle, sniffle* Oh my,  ....this be a sad one Walt, but nicely written

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6 posted 01-21-2000 08:12 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Wow ! Walt Wow !
I think you hit the 'juguler' with this one.
Very nicely done.
~*Marge*~




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Sometimes walt checks in from wayout where ever he is..... Nice work, my friend...
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I like to add a Well done! and Wow! to this too!

Denise
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thankyou all you guys for the feedback yuh makes me cheeks warm
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Walt! This is one of your best! Good job!  
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ANOTHER WOW! HERE FROM ME WALT.
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Walt, this is the first I've read of you, this is great, but very sad.

Parker
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