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wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22

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TEXAS (it's all big)

0 posted 2000-01-21 02:09 AM

Yesterdays never clutched in vain
Even in times he can’t recall
When last she held him through the rain
And he watched her sweetness fall

Thunder rings off the rippling roof
Wakes baby with souring breath
Her love for baby seems aloof
Since the night of her sudden death

A reflex cry from baby tells
The night that mother is gone
To the rain he would say as well
Take your tears and please move on

Yesterday he might just forgive
For tonight he will only sleep
Sweet dreams for baby, mother lives
And the sadness fairs not to creep

Crash you lightning! Crash you thunder!
Wake the baby this way each night
He should know how life once shunned her
And strive to make her dream his fight

Baby might just want to nestle
Against the cold bars of his bed
But one day he will grow to wrestle
With the grief this night has fed

[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 01-21-2000).]

One Who Understands
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since 2000-01-20

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Cedar Rapids, Iowa

1 posted 2000-01-21 02:13 AM

Excellent work

devina
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since 1999-10-28

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Cali

2 posted 2000-01-21 02:40 AM

Wow-I'm stunned by the feeling and emotion in this one...HUGS if it is personal, but Damn good poem all the same...Can I say WOW one more time????

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Temptress

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since 1999-06-15

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3 posted 2000-01-21 02:54 AM

I enjoyed this very much. Shouldn't the word vein be vain though? Please don't slap me. LOL! if you meant to do that.

My favorite stanza is the third one.

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

4 posted 2000-01-21 03:08 AM

what temptress yuh didn't get the witty vein vain thing oh come on..hehehe nonono thanx for catching that editing it now i am

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

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Glen Hope, PA USA

5 posted 2000-01-21 06:58 AM

*sniffle, sniffle* Oh my,

....this be a sad one Walt, but nicely written

At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet. ~Plato

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2000-01-21 08:12 AM

Wow ! Walt Wow !
I think you hit the 'juguler' with this one.
Very nicely done.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Nan

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7 posted 2000-01-21 09:09 AM

Sometimes walt checks in from wayout where ever he is..... Nice work, my friend...

Denise

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8 posted 2000-01-21 09:55 AM

I like to add a Well done! and Wow! to this too!

Denise

wayoutwalt
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TEXAS (it's all big)

9 posted 2000-01-21 05:10 PM

thankyou all you guys for the feedback yuh makes me cheeks warm

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

10 posted 2000-01-21 06:54 PM

Walt! This is one of your best! Good job!

Martie

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11 posted 2000-01-21 07:02 PM

ANOTHER WOW! HERE FROM ME WALT.

Parker
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ON

12 posted 2000-01-21 07:14 PM

Walt, this is the first I've read of you, this is great, but very sad.

Parker

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