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Building With Marshmallows (challenge by Trevor)

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Echo Rhayne
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0 posted 01-21-2000 01:58 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Echo Rhayne

I took a drive down to the store
to see what I could buy,
and then I seemed to remember
a challenge from this guy...

So walking down the aisles
I had to find the bags,
of those things they call marshmallows
but all I found were rags.

I looked around and realized that
this was a Goodwill store.
So feeling quite the stupid one
I headed out the door.

I ended up at 'Food-4-less'
a choice was to be made.
Did I want fluffy or mini?
I picked and then I paid.

I grabbed a bag of fluffy ones
and went back to my home.
I had to build this thing
so I could end this poem.

I never thought that building this
would come as quite the chore.
I opened up the marshmallows
and spilled them on the floor.

By now you're probably wondering
what is it I must build.
The Eiffel Tower from 'mallows.
Now ask me if I'm skilled.

I want to do this oh so right
but I found something wrong.
I didn't buy enough bags, and
this poem is kind of long.

So I wont try and build this thing
I find it much too hard.
So now I'll quit and head on to
Hollywood Boulevard!


 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste.  Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~




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One Who Understands
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1 posted 01-21-2000 02:07 AM       View Profile for One Who Understands   Email One Who Understands   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for One Who Understands

Intreaging at the least I'll say,
But without it there is no way,
That I could smile the way I always do,
After reading poems night and day.

Truly a well thought out piece
Justbleu
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2 posted 01-21-2000 07:22 AM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

I liked the fact you used marshmallows in this...I love marshmallows!!  First time I've seen somebody write a poem about marshmallows!!

Take Care
Bridgette
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3 posted 01-21-2000 07:31 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Echo-

Adorable thoughts.
All my marshmallows end up
in a steamy cup of hot chocolate ...
and yours build towers of strength
and beauty.
~*Marge*~


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Dark Angel
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4 posted 01-21-2000 08:35 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Echo, this is soooo kewl, loved it!!

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Trevor
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5 posted 01-21-2000 09:38 AM       View Profile for Trevor   Email Trevor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Trevor

Great rebuttal to an otherwise goofy challenge....very cute poem, thanks for the read, take care,
Trevor
jbouder
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6 posted 01-21-2000 09:41 AM       View Profile for jbouder   Email jbouder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jbouder

This is so peculiar I KNEW Trevor had to be involved somehow!  

P.S.  Trevor, did you get that package yet?

 Jim

"If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther

Denise
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7 posted 01-21-2000 09:46 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is adoreable, Echo!!  

Denise
Echo Rhayne
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8 posted 01-21-2000 04:45 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

OK, I asked for a good challenge and this was Trevors response...A good challenge...mmmm...how about making world peace happen?   Or perhaps build a life size replica of the Eiffel Tower out of marshmellows? .....sorry, couldn't resist...

ok so I tried to build the life size replica of the Eiffel Tower, but like I said, I only bought one bag hehe.  Now this was quite funy and I got a big laugh abou tit, but such as he couldnt resist tping it, I couldnt resist typing a poem about it.  So I am glad it was enjoyed =)


 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~


SnglDad
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9 posted 01-21-2000 09:20 PM       View Profile for SnglDad   Email SnglDad   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SnglDad

LoL,
If you can`t build the tower,atleast you`ll have some midnight snack`s.
I buy all my underclothing at the Goodwill I figure their gunna get stained anyway.
lol....yea I know,I have a twisted mind.
Sorry
Thanx for the laugh
                            
                           Joel
WhtDove
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10 posted 01-21-2000 09:55 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Alright you got me on this one. hehe...I thought for sure you were gonna say you couldn't finish building it cause you ate the marshmallows. Cute Melanie!

 <*\\\><
Where there is faith,
there is love.
Where there is love,
there is peace.
Where there is peace,
there is GOD.
Where there is GOD,
there is no need.

Hallmark


Trevor
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11 posted 01-21-2000 10:33 PM       View Profile for Trevor   Email Trevor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Trevor

Jim,
I'm locked and loaded and ready to "really" clean the restaurant I work at. And you, I hope you didn't eat the brown ones man, they were the left over ones my parents had from Woodstock  
Munda
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12 posted 01-22-2000 08:30 AM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

LOL I never thought you'd take this challenge Echo ! LOL you did a great job  
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