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when the moon glowed red

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bsquirrel
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0 posted 01-21-2000 01:54 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bsquirrel

-when the moon glowed red-
Between two trees and
The sound of planes,
Slow shadow travels.

Dull shining,
Then bright as moonlit glass
(borrowed sunlight).

Darker at its tinge than the night sky,
Lower half god-hidden
In curved starlessness.

Skyhigh upward facing crescent,
Downturned side black,
Spreading a million gallons of frozen ink.

In front of me, a pool lit by underwater lights,
Reflections from sequined coils around tree trunks.
Its surface except for shadows false.

(I remember when I was a boy in church,
Every light reflection was a laser
Or iridescent insect caught in my frames.

When I moved my head,
The lasers would travel through whole pews.
People not realizing they were now shot.

Secular against the sacred.
I used to will the altar candles to jump.
Sometimes the flames followed my instructions.)

A bright sliver now perched against a treetop.
The lowest branches like sculpted piles of light.
The uppermost risen to abstract darkness.

Now like a smile, then nothing.
I imagine I see a dark smudge.
Only clouds.

"Maybe it fell out of the sky and into the pool," a child says to his mother.

Finally, the patchwork banks roll away.
The moon is reddish hewn,
A planet more than a satellite.

Far removed from the treetops and floating freely, beautifully, shared.

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One Who Understands
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1 posted 01-21-2000 01:59 AM       View Profile for One Who Understands   Email One Who Understands   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for One Who Understands

Excellent way of showing how observent you are   Wonderful piece
bsquirrel
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2 posted 01-21-2000 02:13 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

I like you already.   Thanks. Beautiful eclipse by the way, for those who might have missed it. I'm not sure where it was visible from besides the west coast, but it was worth being a little cold for.

Mike
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Wonderfully descriptive...and here I was working and missed it  
devina
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4 posted 01-21-2000 02:33 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Lovely description!! And yes...I missed it too Ruth!!!!

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5 posted 01-21-2000 06:28 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Mike-

Your poem is almost as lovely as the
eclipse itself.  In the clear skies of
the Florida night the beauty of the event
was clearly and delightfully viewed.

Your ~telescoping pen ~ magnified it
with brillance.

Thank you for capturing it.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Denise
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Beautiful poem, thanks for the view!  

Denise
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7 posted 01-21-2000 02:32 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

It was a wonderous sight, wasn't it.  I enjoyed the view your poem gave as well, maybe more.
Marilyn
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8 posted 01-21-2000 02:38 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

I too missed the view but you showed me one just as lovely. Thankyou so much for filling me in on what I missed.  
WhtDove
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9 posted 01-21-2000 10:46 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

I nearly froze solid, but I saw it and what an awesome sight it was!

 <*\\\><
Where there is faith,
there is love.
Where there is love,
there is peace.
Where there is peace,
there is GOD.
Where there is GOD,
there is no need.

Hallmark


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10 posted 05-22-2002 07:20 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Ah, someone who was there...

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Janet Marie
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11 posted 05-22-2002 09:29 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

How cool is this poem.....
wow...I am glad I didnt miss this...
very unique and clever write of imagery, metaphor and analogy...love the flashbacks of your church memories..they added a whole nother realm and angle to this.
Some night when insomnia wins...I need to play in the archives and find some of your older posts again, I recall some awesome stuff from the early days of 6-7-8 and so on. But then awesome poests always write awesome "stuff"

How long can a girl be haunted by you ...
Soon I'll grow up and I wont even flinch at your name.

Alanis Morissette

 
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