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Kevin

Senior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

0 posted 2000-01-21 12:40 PM

welcome back to town old friend
why don’t you get out of the rain
it seems like it was last week when
I kicked you out of my heart, pain.

and here you are with plans to stay
so soon your bags have been unpacked
and nothing to you I can say
to keep this weary heart intact

so dry off here, you might as well
its not like you will soon subside
you’ll be here long, I can tell
for tears are pouring hard outside.

Astraea
Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 378
California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now

1 posted 2000-01-21 12:50 PM

Wow. I love this one. Simple, to the point, and beautifully written. Lovely!

~Astraea

"Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

One Who Understands
Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 251
Cedar Rapids, Iowa

2 posted 2000-01-21 01:26 AM

Wonderful corralation between tears and rain

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

3 posted 2000-01-21 01:27 AM

This is so sadly touching...pain is a pain, isn't it? Just never knows when to leave!

Good one, Kevin!!

Denise

Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

4 posted 2000-01-21 01:35 AM

So sad and helpless, you've written this very well.

May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

--Author Unknown

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

5 posted 2000-01-21 02:08 AM

Well written, but terribly sad

At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet. ~Plato

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
Senior Member

since 1999-08-26

Posts 997
northern mountains, Idaho

6 posted 2000-01-21 03:13 AM

Kevin, you astound me, poem after poem. I am beginning to think that you are really seventy years old, and are posting a picture from your teens.

You couldn't possibly have such talent, speaking deeply as though from a long life, and so eloquently, with a knowledge of so much pain, if you were really that young!

Excellent poem whatever your age.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2000-01-21 07:12 AM

Kevin-

What saddness seems to
come in your rains.
May you find a bright umbrella
to shelter you until the rays
of love shine brightly upon you.

~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Parker
Member Elite

since 2000-01-06

Posts 3129
ON

8 posted 2000-01-21 11:55 AM

I agree with Rosemary, there on old guy behind that picture, you couldn't be that young. I don't think you've admitted your age anywhere have you. This is so good. I love how you put so much meaning into so few words.

parker

Kevin

Senior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

9 posted 2000-01-21 09:46 PM

Seventeen in body, seventy in mind =)

thanks for the replies guys

sometimes i read my poetry and swear to my grave that I couldnt have written it,
its like there are two me's =)

but i assure you, im not even considered an adult till this august, i cant even go in the adult forum! lol

such is life

~ViXeN~
Member

since 2000-01-09

Posts 93
Guelph, Ont. Canada

10 posted 2000-01-22 12:27 PM

Kev, this one is sad!
i like it but it breaks my heart to know that you are feeling like this!
shannon

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