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Glass Between Us

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Vampire'sMistress
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0 posted 01-20-2000 06:07 PM       View Profile for Vampire'sMistress   Email Vampire'sMistress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Vampire'sMistress

Glass Between Us

seeing your lips moving
bearing word for word
but absorbed by this inpenetrable
glass between us
dying
unheard unheard unheard

trying hard to catch them
and to give a signal back
but hidden behind
this icecold wall
you neither feel nor see my tears
for sorrow fall

i miss u miss what we had before and
i miss u miss what we had before but
i cant ignore - the silence

mirror-like reflections
of my mute screaming eyes
the truth burning inside
my shattering cinder heart
though it
cries cries cries

why does hurt destroy me
and not this evil emptiness
but hidden behind
this invsible wall
you neither feel nor see my tears
for sorrow fall

and i miss u miss what we had before
and i miss u miss what we had before
but i cant ignore - the silence

Carpe Noctem,

VM

( for more details about me refer to my very first poem in the DarkPassion Forum )

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devina
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since 10-28-1999
Posts 3189
Northern Cali


1 posted 01-20-2000 06:12 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

I think OP serves you well, your style is very unique, liked it alot!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Vampire'sMistress
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2 posted 01-21-2000 04:10 AM       View Profile for Vampire'sMistress   Email Vampire'sMistress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Vampire'sMistress

Thank you so much devina.
I know most people do not like this style, but sometimes I wanna feel free in what I do, without taking care for the common rules.
I know that I still have a lot to learn -reading your poems as well as from all of you here will help me.

Have a nice day, let the sun shine in your heart,

VM
Dark Angel
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since 08-04-99
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3 posted 01-21-2000 08:25 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Ohhh My I love this, this is absolutley beautiful! love your style looking forward to reading more  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


spiked
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since 01-13-2000
Posts 886
Hammond, La USA


4 posted 01-21-2000 11:14 AM       View Profile for spiked   Email spiked   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spiked

Style should be from the writers perspective and the reader should take from it what is given. The poem is beautiful and sad thank you.
Continue to write as you feel. True writing has no rules.
JD
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since 11-05-1999
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5 posted 01-21-2000 11:52 AM       View Profile for JD   Email JD   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JD

Strage but i like it

JD



 Everything Dies


Skyfyre
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since 08-15-99
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Sitting in Michael's Lap


6 posted 01-21-2000 01:21 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Liking this much!  Good story, artfully rendered, VM!

--Kess


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

Vampire'sMistress
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7 posted 01-21-2000 04:16 PM       View Profile for Vampire'sMistress   Email Vampire'sMistress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Vampire'sMistress

thx all
i did not expect so positive comments
Carpe Noctem,

VM
One Who Understands
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since 01-20-2000
Posts 252
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8 posted 01-21-2000 04:19 PM       View Profile for One Who Understands   Email One Who Understands   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for One Who Understands

You have a very unique style of writing.

I enjoyed this piece very much
Vampire'sMistress
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9 posted 01-22-2000 08:39 AM       View Profile for Vampire'sMistress   Email Vampire'sMistress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Vampire'sMistress

thank you One.
I enjoy your pieces as well - especially this one for your friend.

Cheers,

VM

 ~our lifes are nothing but words written with a stick in water~
 
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