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A Voice From The Deep

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Denise
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0 posted 01-20-2000 10:36 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Denise

One sailed forth into life that day
Who offered friendship's hand to me
Sincerity rolled like the sea
In waves that washed the fear away.

So gentle was this tide I'd found
I knew no safeguards need I take
In soothing ever gentle wake
I felt as though on solid ground.

At last I sensed no need to hide
To batten down the inner self
To stow away on some dark shelf
The me that was recessed inside.

Uncharted was, to me, this course
Through many fathoms darkly deep
Yet still no secrets did I keep
I felt the anchor's weighted force.

Now in the choppy seas I flail
Preservers gone - they'd all been tossed
A lesson learn from one who's lost
Still shipwrecks happen in the gale.



 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~



[This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 01-20-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Denise - All Rights Reserved
RSEvans
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1 posted 01-20-2000 10:38 AM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

I wrote something somewhat similar waaaaaaay back in Open 2.  But it wasn't nearly this beautiful and poetic.  It's good to be back.
Local Rebel
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2 posted 01-20-2000 10:46 AM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Always a pleasure to read you D!

A thought came to mind that I'll share...

The opening..

One sailed forth into life that day..

Have your way with it  
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3 posted 01-20-2000 10:58 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Enjoyed this one very much!! Well done!
Danny Holloway
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4 posted 01-20-2000 10:59 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

How sad, to reveal secrets, only to have them tossed overboard.  Unfortunate for the one on the horizon, who may not have those secrets shared.  Really enjoyed reading this poem.  A glimpse into the heart.
DH

 
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Ahhhh!You set my soul at ease with that one.The ocean is a big part of my life, and I'm sure this is true of you as well. Reading that poem brought back memories of glass calm seas, both night and day. I think I'll print this one out.Ahhhhh.....
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6 posted 01-20-2000 11:10 AM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

Denise, I really like this. Beautifully written yet a melancholy ending without bitterness. Nicely done

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
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7 posted 01-20-2000 12:08 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Rob - Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it! What is the title of yours?

L.R. - Thanks so much! I like that better, too!

Suthern - Thanks a bunch for your always kind words!

Danny - Thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Earthtones - I'm glad you liked it! Yes, the ocean's in my soul, but sadly not close enough geographically.

WildChild - Thanks for your kind words! And you're right - no bitterness - just yet another sad lesson learned.

Thanks again, everybody! I always appreciate your reading and commenting!  

Denise
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This is very beautiful Denise...I love the sea, my dream house would be perched in clear view of it...but, as you well know, I'd have to leave PA to do it...lol
Nice poem  
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9 posted 01-20-2000 12:25 PM       View Profile for fc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fc

sigh, this is beautiful, happy for you, sad for me....I used to have this.....or I guess maybe a pretense of such...sigh
Echo Rhayne
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10 posted 01-20-2000 03:58 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Denise, what a beautiful poem!  I truly enjoyed it!

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~


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11 posted 01-20-2000 04:37 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

It is sad that we open doors that hurt
but still inside the pain
a lesson of the heart remains
nothing lost then nothing gained.

Beautiful poem Denise!
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12 posted 01-20-2000 07:05 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you, Ruth, FC, Echo and Martie for reading and for your lovely comments! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Ruth- wouldn't that be lovely?....it's my dream too....*sigh*

Denise
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Yes...this is bittersweet and beautiful Denise..

Munda
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14 posted 01-20-2000 07:18 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

Loved this poem Denise ! Maybe the lesson was sad, it made you write a beautiful poem, so something good came out of it, right ?  
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15 posted 01-20-2000 08:12 PM       View Profile for Cutie Putootie   Email Cutie Putootie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cutie Putootie

I must say even though I am computer illiterate I sure can fine the pretty colors and fonts on this thing.  

I must say snyder this is an excellant written poem, and since I enjoy posting more than I do writing I'll start reading more of your poems and posting.  I must say this place is very nice.
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Thank you Pepper, Munda and Cutie for reading and commenting! I'm glad that you liked it!  

Pepper - I'll go to sleep tonight dreaming of Florida!

Munda - I always look for that silver lining too!

Cutie - very pretty colors and fonts to choose from! It is fun, isn't it?!
Lynn
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17 posted 01-20-2000 09:07 PM       View Profile for Lynn   Email Lynn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lynn

Beautiful Denise.

 If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~
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18 posted 01-20-2000 09:15 PM       View Profile for Kevin   Email Kevin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kevin

WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW!

this is incredible

my favorite, ahh i have to read it again
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dsnyder,
I have to agree with everyone, it's very beautifully written.  I know how it feels to be tossed overboard!!!  All I can say is, at least we open up ourselves, I would rather have loved, even if the other doesn't love us back, than never to have loved at all!
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20 posted 01-20-2000 10:49 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Denise-

Differently lovely from your quill.
Really a 'thinker' poem.  
Thank you for this.

I couldn't help being reminded of
the phrase, 'sink or swim'.  
Sometimes we get so lost in the
sea of emotion that we can sink.

I'm thankful that you're a ~swimmer~.
Love ~Marge~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Denise
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Lynn- thanks so much!

Kevin- thanks for the WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW!

Tulip- yes, it still is better, you're right!

Marge- yes, I have learned to swim very well! Thanks for the lovely poem!

I'm glad you all enjoyed it! Thanks again!

Denise

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22 posted 01-21-2000 01:22 AM       View Profile for One Who Understands   Email One Who Understands   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for One Who Understands

Excellent

Little did I know, I would find such a sea of creative friends
Nan
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Sometimes we just choose the wrong ship to set sail upon, don't we???.... Nice one, Denise...
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Thank you One Who Understands and Nan for your kind comments! It is always appreciated!

Nan- Yep, sometimes we surely do!!

Denise
 
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