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Denise
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0 posted 2000-01-20 10:36 AM


One sailed forth into life that day
Who offered friendship's hand to me
Sincerity rolled like the sea
In waves that washed the fear away.

So gentle was this tide I'd found
I knew no safeguards need I take
In soothing ever gentle wake
I felt as though on solid ground.

At last I sensed no need to hide
To batten down the inner self
To stow away on some dark shelf
The me that was recessed inside.

Uncharted was, to me, this course
Through many fathoms darkly deep
Yet still no secrets did I keep
I felt the anchor's weighted force.

Now in the choppy seas I flail
Preservers gone - they'd all been tossed
A lesson learn from one who's lost
Still shipwrecks happen in the gale.

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 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~



[This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 01-20-2000).]

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RSEvans
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1 posted 2000-01-20 10:38 AM


I wrote something somewhat similar waaaaaaay back in Open 2.  But it wasn't nearly this beautiful and poetic.  It's good to be back.
Local Rebel
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2 posted 2000-01-20 10:46 AM


Always a pleasure to read you D!

A thought came to mind that I'll share...

The opening..

One sailed forth into life that day..

Have your way with it  

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3 posted 2000-01-20 10:58 AM


Enjoyed this one very much!! Well done!
Danny Holloway
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4 posted 2000-01-20 10:59 AM


How sad, to reveal secrets, only to have them tossed overboard.  Unfortunate for the one on the horizon, who may not have those secrets shared.  Really enjoyed reading this poem.  A glimpse into the heart.
DH

 

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5 posted 2000-01-20 11:03 AM



Ahhhh!You set my soul at ease with that one.The ocean is a big part of my life, and I'm sure this is true of you as well. Reading that poem brought back memories of glass calm seas, both night and day. I think I'll print this one out.Ahhhhh.....

PhaerieChild
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6 posted 2000-01-20 11:10 AM


Denise, I really like this. Beautifully written yet a melancholy ending without bitterness. Nicely done

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho



Denise
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7 posted 2000-01-20 12:08 PM


Rob - Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it! What is the title of yours?

L.R. - Thanks so much! I like that better, too!

Suthern - Thanks a bunch for your always kind words!

Danny - Thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Earthtones - I'm glad you liked it! Yes, the ocean's in my soul, but sadly not close enough geographically.

WildChild - Thanks for your kind words! And you're right - no bitterness - just yet another sad lesson learned.

Thanks again, everybody! I always appreciate your reading and commenting!  

Denise

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8 posted 2000-01-20 12:20 PM


This is very beautiful Denise...I love the sea, my dream house would be perched in clear view of it...but, as you well know, I'd have to leave PA to do it...lol
Nice poem  

fc
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9 posted 2000-01-20 12:25 PM


sigh, this is beautiful, happy for you, sad for me....I used to have this.....or I guess maybe a pretense of such...sigh
Echo Rhayne
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10 posted 2000-01-20 03:58 PM


Denise, what a beautiful poem!  I truly enjoyed it!

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~



Martie
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11 posted 2000-01-20 04:37 PM


It is sad that we open doors that hurt
but still inside the pain
a lesson of the heart remains
nothing lost then nothing gained.

Beautiful poem Denise!

Denise
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12 posted 2000-01-20 07:05 PM


Thank you, Ruth, FC, Echo and Martie for reading and for your lovely comments! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Ruth- wouldn't that be lovely?....it's my dream too....*sigh*

Denise

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13 posted 2000-01-20 07:14 PM


Yes...this is bittersweet and beautiful Denise..


Munda
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14 posted 2000-01-20 07:18 PM


Loved this poem Denise ! Maybe the lesson was sad, it made you write a beautiful poem, so something good came out of it, right ?  
Cutie Putootie
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15 posted 2000-01-20 08:12 PM


I must say even though I am computer illiterate I sure can fine the pretty colors and fonts on this thing.  

I must say snyder this is an excellant written poem, and since I enjoy posting more than I do writing I'll start reading more of your poems and posting.  I must say this place is very nice.

Denise
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16 posted 2000-01-20 08:41 PM


Thank you Pepper, Munda and Cutie for reading and commenting! I'm glad that you liked it!  

Pepper - I'll go to sleep tonight dreaming of Florida!

Munda - I always look for that silver lining too!

Cutie - very pretty colors and fonts to choose from! It is fun, isn't it?!

Lynn
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17 posted 2000-01-20 09:07 PM


Beautiful Denise.

 If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~

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18 posted 2000-01-20 09:15 PM


WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW!

this is incredible

my favorite, ahh i have to read it again

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19 posted 2000-01-20 10:04 PM


dsnyder,
I have to agree with everyone, it's very beautifully written.  I know how it feels to be tossed overboard!!!  All I can say is, at least we open up ourselves, I would rather have loved, even if the other doesn't love us back, than never to have loved at all!

Marge Tindal
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20 posted 2000-01-20 10:49 PM


Denise-

Differently lovely from your quill.
Really a 'thinker' poem.  
Thank you for this.

I couldn't help being reminded of
the phrase, 'sink or swim'.  
Sometimes we get so lost in the
sea of emotion that we can sink.

I'm thankful that you're a ~swimmer~.
Love ~Marge~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Denise
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21 posted 2000-01-21 12:57 PM


Lynn- thanks so much!

Kevin- thanks for the WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW!

Tulip- yes, it still is better, you're right!

Marge- yes, I have learned to swim very well! Thanks for the lovely poem!

I'm glad you all enjoyed it! Thanks again!

Denise


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22 posted 2000-01-21 01:22 AM


Excellent

Little did I know, I would find such a sea of creative friends

Nan
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23 posted 2000-01-21 08:19 AM


Sometimes we just choose the wrong ship to set sail upon, don't we???.... Nice one, Denise...
Denise
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24 posted 2000-01-21 09:42 AM


Thank you One Who Understands and Nan for your kind comments! It is always appreciated!

Nan- Yep, sometimes we surely do!!

Denise

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25 posted 2000-01-21 11:27 AM


Denise this is wonderfull, I really love your use of the sea for this poem.

Parker

Denise
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26 posted 2000-01-21 05:27 PM


Thank you Parker, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Denise

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27 posted 2000-01-21 10:27 PM


May I add my kudos to this fine piece?  You cover many emotions here, not the least of them, the possibility of drowning in one's own aftermath.

I have much to do to catch up with you.  Well done!

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow



Denise
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28 posted 2000-01-22 11:51 AM


You may add your commments to my work anytime you'd like to Sunshine! I'm flattered! Thanks for reading and commenting!
It is always appreciated!  

Denise

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29 posted 2000-02-25 11:25 AM


Now that you figured out this URL stuff, I'm glad you sent this to me! I'm sorry I missed it! But I have it now, and you write an incredible piece on a sad lesson!  God Bless you Denise!
Denise
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30 posted 2000-02-25 07:25 PM


Thanks, Rebecca! I'm glad you liked it! Now, between you and Cindy I am learning about these dang computers!!

Denise

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31 posted 2004-06-06 01:58 PM


glad I ran across this
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