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Corey Collier
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 17


0 posted 2000-01-20 03:22 AM



Her eyes burn like fire, full of passion.
Melting my frozen heart with a glance.
Her sweet and soft touch, like rose petals.
Our hearts meet in midair.  Love is sparked.
The promises.  The dreams.  Eternity?
Shattered.
Empty.
Frozen.
Again.
Someone so special to me, killing me.
Again.
Her flames have scorched my heart.
I am alone....
Again.


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Dark Angel
Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

1 posted 2000-01-20 04:18 AM


This is really sad Corey, I am sorry.

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136
Mobile, AL
2 posted 2000-01-20 04:51 AM


I can feel the rise and fall of emotion in this one. This is the tone and effect I love in a poem. A delightful find.

 Don't gain my affections and cover my eyes. In blindness I will only swing harder.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
3 posted 2000-01-20 10:06 AM


Oh, very sad  
Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
4 posted 2000-01-20 03:27 PM


How very sad indeed  

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~



Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

5 posted 2000-01-20 07:13 PM


Sad and beautiful. Wonderful expression of the pain.

Denise

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
6 posted 2000-01-20 08:27 PM


Good poem! You portrayed the emotions in the words and the form...  
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