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tracie66
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0 posted 01-20-2000 03:19 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66



Sorrow

I thought I knew you
I thought I loved you

Hurt is how I felt
deep inside my heart

I loved you dearly
I thought you loved me too

The pain is great I cannot bear it
                      
we must part

Can't you see what you've done
The pain inside

You don't know you never will
You just slide away like the tide

Never see me or touch me like you did
Never Close
Never near
My heart forbids

I will close you out
I will feel no more pain

New love, closeness and respect one day will be mine
through my past and now my knowledge
I will gain
And once more where I wiltered I will shine

  

© Copyright 2000 Tracie Maree Collis - All Rights Reserved
Temptress
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1 posted 01-20-2000 05:03 AM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

"...slide away with the tide"
That was a sad poem, and this was my favorite line.
But...friend..The tide always comes back at some point doesn't it? That thought makes your poem hopeful when I read it.   Beautifully done.


 Don't gain my affections and cover my eyes. In blindness I will only swing harder.
tracie66
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2 posted 01-20-2000 05:42 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Dear Temptress
Thankyou for your reply..I'm new at this and this poem was my second submitted. So to see a reply was fabulous.
and yes every now and again the tide does slide back in and it is painful but I am over him thankfully.  Once again thanks
HelmutB
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3 posted 01-20-2000 06:13 AM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Life comes back in circles
It always does
A nother nice piece but yet sad again
It's time to take the incoming tide
and start to laugh now and then
just like temptress wrote
Very nice poem
Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 01-20-2000 08:04 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Well, you certainly expressed sorrow of a lost love just how I remember it. Very nicely written
Liz
hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 01-20-2000 10:16 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Excellent final line "And once more where I wiltered I will shine"  
Echo Rhayne
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6 posted 01-20-2000 03:30 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

LoL, I think Ruth and I are thinking alike    I too especially liked the last line 'And once more where I wiltered I will shine.'  In those words alone there is so much that seems to be said!!  

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~


Sonny
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7 posted 01-20-2000 04:15 PM       View Profile for Sonny   Email Sonny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sonny

Traci66 -

     I very much enjoyed the transition of your poem.  The breaking through of facades to the ultimate truth left me with a sense of hope.  Looking forward to seeing more of your work.

Sonny
    
Denise
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8 posted 01-20-2000 05:03 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent poem, Tracie! The last line was my favorite, too!  

Denise
tracie66
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9 posted 01-23-2000 01:15 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Thanks to everyone who made comments I'm so glad I found this site your all so very generous with your remarks and I thankyou once again.
I to look forward to reading all of your pieces.
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