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Echo Rhayne
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0 posted 01-20-2000 03:12 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Gaze into my heart, to see how I feel.
Spare me some time, but don't send a bill.
Bestow me the power, to do what I can.
Step into my shoes, to know where I stand.

Present to me, a reason to live.
Take from me, all that I have to give.
Enlighten me, with all that you know.
Turn me loose, but don't let me go.

Touch me, but watch where you touch.
Want me, but not quite as much.
Need me, as I've needed you.
Capture my dreams, and make them come true.

Stay with me, when nobody's there.
Care for me, when no one else cares.
Cover me, when I need to hide.
Walk on me, but don't step on my pride.

Loathe me, but not much at all.
Catch me, if I ever fall.
Rescue me, when I need to be saved.
Carry me, but not to my grave!


 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~


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PhaerieChild
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1 posted 01-20-2000 03:20 AM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

Echo, this is beautiful!! You have such a magical way with words that cuts right to the heart of everything. This is very poignant!!

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho


Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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2 posted 01-20-2000 03:31 AM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

This is wonderful!  Well worded, well spoken.  My favorite line is the last: "Carry me, but not to my grave!"
Dark Angel
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3 posted 01-20-2000 04:04 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Echo, this is terrific!! loved it  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Marge Tindal
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4 posted 01-20-2000 07:33 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Echo-

Again, you have reached in to your heart and have reached mine in doing so.

'Present to me, a reason to live.
Take from me, all that I have to give.
Enlighten me, with all that you know.
Turn me loose, but don't let me go.'

Awesome, just awesome.
~*Marge*~



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Elizabeth Santos
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5 posted 01-20-2000 08:01 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

You have been writing some fine poetry, dear poet, and I especially enjoyed this one. Please keep up the great writng
Liz
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on the threshold of a dream


6 posted 01-20-2000 09:31 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

This is great, Echo!! Well done!
hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 01-20-2000 10:28 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Very beautiful Echo  

 At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet. ~Plato
Echo Rhayne
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8 posted 01-20-2000 04:22 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Shawna...I never thought of myself as having magical ways with my words to cut to the heart of everything, thank you, *blush*

Rosemary...I am glad that you liked this!  I too like the last two lines, kind of has a special meaning right now to me  

Dark Angel...Glad you liked it!

Marge...reached into your heart as well did I, eeeeew, that would make quite a mess hehe j/k  Thank you for your comment!

Elizabeth...Well I will keep up the writing LoL, don't know if it is great, but I guess all of you cant be wrong hehe  Hm or can you??  hehe

suthern and Ruth....Thank you both most kindly!

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~


Denise
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9 posted 01-20-2000 04:51 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Some people write and make me *sigh*
Some make me laugh, some make me cry
Some paint a picture I can see
You do it all and beautifully!!  

Denise
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10 posted 01-20-2000 10:22 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

I hope someday to be able to express my heart like you did here! I loved it.-SEA
Marilyn
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11 posted 01-20-2000 10:35 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

This is so perfectly what I need. Oh you have stolen the words right from my aching heart. Bravo Echo.
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12 posted 01-20-2000 10:44 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Echo, there are a plethora of wonderful lines in this piece. It's very hard to pick a favorite. I like them all. Well done!!!
WhtDove
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13 posted 01-20-2000 11:23 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Magical? Oh yea, you do have a way with words. I told ya you were gifted!  I love this, one of my favorites!!! One and only who can fit this bill ya know?
Excellent work Mel!

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there is love.
Where there is love,
there is peace.
Where there is peace,
there is GOD.
Where there is GOD,
there is no need.

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