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My Beta Spends His Free Time Doing Laps and Dreaming of Becoming a Spider

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Wendy Flora
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0 posted 01-19-2000 05:17 PM       View Profile for Wendy Flora   Email Wendy Flora   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Wendy Flora

There I was,
Bobbing at the bottom of the bowl
Some idle Tuesday
(maybe Sunday … hell, what do I know?)
I'd already done my rounds,
Checked out the diver -
Yep, still drowned .
Checked out my treasure chest -
Still there.
The weird girl had dropped the food
And bolted…
Same ole, same ole.
I started contemplating
Taking a nap…
Then I saw it!
This thing, this beautiful thing!
Peeked its head out from behind
The Black Box.
It was a beautiful black beauty
A glistening ruby on its belly.
I hung frozen behind the castle,
Eyeing the creature as it extended each spindly stalk,
Heading across the Flat Browness.
It moved so gracefully, gliding more than anything else.
O, that I moved with such dignity!
I dart to and fro, not like this lovely thing.
I moved right up to the Clear Hardness to peer at it.
It reached the Tall Whiteness
Extending one fin-stalk out to touch it
The, wonder of wonders!
It began moving up!
Higher and higher it went, and I
Floated up to the water's surface to watch.
When it reached the Highest Tall Point,
It began to do something…
I don't know how to describe!
A silvery strand began to descend from the thing
It looked like a drop of water
But it wasn't.
The drop of water started
Looking like a shape
It was round like my bowl,
But with lots of lines.
It was beautiful! All shimmery and new.
What I wouldn't give to be that creature!
To be able to make… to create…
Instead of just able
To swim.

© Copyright 2000 Wendy Flora - All Rights Reserved
Balladeer
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1 posted 01-19-2000 05:29 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Now this is wonderful, creative writing! Great thoughts and innovative creation. Congrats from another one of the fish!  
Mike
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2 posted 01-19-2000 06:24 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

This I like.  Muchly.
Wendy Flora
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3 posted 01-19-2000 07:07 PM       View Profile for Wendy Flora   Email Wendy Flora   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wendy Flora

Thank you.    I'm sure Cupid (my fish) thanks you too! -wen
Andrew Scott
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4 posted 01-19-2000 07:14 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Very cool perspective.  Very unique... I'm curious to know what brought you to write this?  
Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 01-19-2000 07:16 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Wendy,
Creative, true, good paint, yes, well done,
and I did enjoy the read. I'll have another.
RainbowGirl
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6 posted 01-19-2000 08:17 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Stunning  

HUGS

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.

Wendy Flora
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7 posted 01-20-2000 08:42 AM       View Profile for Wendy Flora   Email Wendy Flora   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wendy Flora

What brought me to write this?  A few things... My fish (Cupid), a really boring Linguistics class, and a painting in an art magazine entitled "Jerome Spends His Free Time Daydreaming of Being Reincarnated as a Snake."  I loved the title of that painting, I was bored in class, and I was thinking about my fish... voila.     (not as glamourous as a flash of lightning or anything, but it was still fun to write) -wen
hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 01-20-2000 10:20 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Wonderful free verse...extreamly creative  
haze
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9 posted 01-20-2000 10:25 AM       View Profile for haze   Email haze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit haze's Home Page   View IP for haze

What a unique perspective, fabulous free-verse...Its flowing and dreamy without being sappy...GRAND KUDOS!!!


(If this was CA I would suggest a honing of some unnecessary language; Its not and I will only if asked.)


Strong Applause Wen...
~haze
Wendy Flora
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10 posted 01-20-2000 11:08 AM       View Profile for Wendy Flora   Email Wendy Flora   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wendy Flora

Oh, please do!  I don't care if its CA or not, I love help anytime.    -wen
FreeByrd
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11 posted 01-20-2000 11:56 AM       View Profile for FreeByrd   Email FreeByrd   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit FreeByrd's Home Page   View IP for FreeByrd

Slick perspective.

Cupid also aspires too something greater than he/she is.

I'm liken it.  

 There must be some kinda way out of here... say the joker to the thief

There's to much confusion, I can't get no relief

- Hendrix


Andrew Scott
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12 posted 01-20-2000 03:03 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Linguistics class... took that in college and really enjoyed it... but then I like and such and it reminded me of code breaking. Anyway... your catalyst mixture seems to be far more safe than say that bolt of lightning.  Cool stuff... thanks again for sharing.
Nan
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13 posted 01-20-2000 03:40 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Hehe.... This reminds me of times when I'd look out of my picture window... and feel like I was the fish in the tank - and all those people outside were peering in at me... ..Nice one...
 
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