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Rewsponse to Toe's repost of a fictional Balladeer poem!

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Balladeer
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0 posted 01-19-2000 04:49 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer


Well, Toe, my friend, I must agree
I've learned some things, all right.
I've learned so much of poetry
Since you've been on this site.

I used to think that it was right,
At least some of the time,
That, when one writes a rhyming poem,
The words are supposed to rhyme!!

You blew away that fallacy
And proved it so untrue.
Now I know "door" and "hard" DO rhyme
And it's all thanks to you.

I used to think it added to
A poem and made it sweeter
If one would take the time to try
To use some kind of meter.

How wrong I was!!! There is no need
To make the lines seem fluid.
Just chop them up like Lizzie B.
And write like Toe the Druid!

And, finally, I thought it good
If, even by pretense,
One took the time and effort to
Write something that made sense.

Oh, boy!! Now, how naiive was that?!
Those years I spent so blind!
When all I had to do was write
Like I had lost my mind!

Thank you, Toe. You freed me from
Those silly rules I knew.
I'm getting a lobotomy
So I can write like you!!!!


© Copyright 2000 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
jbouder
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1 posted 01-19-2000 04:56 PM       View Profile for jbouder   Email jbouder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jbouder

Excellent rewsponce, Ballads.  

 Jim

"If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther

fc
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2 posted 01-19-2000 05:00 PM       View Profile for fc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fc

lol what a perfect response  
Martie
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3 posted 01-19-2000 05:04 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

So nice to see you guys back at it again.
Danny Holloway
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4 posted 01-19-2000 05:04 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

I am freed as well, to do a writers bidding,
I can let it all hang out, just kidding!
Enjoyed reading this.  I like your sense of humor!
DH

 
Nicole
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5 posted 01-19-2000 05:09 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

LOL!     I needed that!  And all this time I was struggling horribly with the same things, and now I know I don't have to!  What a relief. *whew*  



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6 posted 01-19-2000 05:26 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

All that rhyme and meter... and the guy can't spell worth a damn!! What a rewsponse, Deer! *G*
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7 posted 01-19-2000 05:47 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Ah, Suthern girl, it makes my day
Each time you join into the fray
I know you follow Toe so close
When he stops quick, you break your nose.

I do admire, though, your devotion
And your misguided strong emotion.
If a typo fills you with such glee,
Accept it happily from me  
Denise
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8 posted 01-19-2000 06:28 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Yep, like I said, a laugh a minute!!!  
Andrew Scott
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9 posted 01-19-2000 07:07 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Sir Balladeer:  Now that you have a clearer understanding of poetry... when do we get to read the new you?  I remember you once saying that you would never post your worst.  Well?, with the new and improved you writing in the Toerag poetic format when do we get to read it?  
Marilyn
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10 posted 01-19-2000 09:11 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

I agree with Sir Andrew..When do we get to see the new syle of the great one? You should do him the honor since he fought so galently beside you in the veggie wars. I do believe he sustained a serious injery in that battle. Isn't that right Andrew? You took a hit during a cheery raid? I believe that is correct...lol.
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11 posted 01-19-2000 09:24 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

ok, Andrew. Here it is....

Hello, there folks, my name is Toerag
I escaped from a Russian gulag
I am a professor of foto-graphy
And I write poetry for a laughie.

My friend is LongJohn. He's a sailor
And Suthern wishes I would nail her
Balladeer's my one true mentor
Nan chases me with her eraser.

I found a home right here at Passions
And I'll stay here for the long duration
They like my pottery, you see
and that tickles the s**t out of me!


waddayathink, Andrew?


hoot_owl_rn
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12 posted 01-19-2000 10:11 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

ROFLMAO...well, I'm glad I mentioned that one   Hey, I didn't think it sounded like you, but I have my bad days too   (more than good some times...lol)
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13 posted 01-19-2000 10:47 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Balladeer-

These little poetic frays
get more vivid everyday.
I, for one, just love the pace
of you two guys, in each other's face.

Balladeer,
what you have here,
is a whopping dose,
of what comes close
to being your best ~deer~.

It's always fun
and rhyming folly
to see you both
so very jolly.

I hope that Toe
and you, both go
head to head in the ring.
While we all sit at ringside
and laugh at the main event.
Now where do we get tickets?
Love ~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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WhtDove
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14 posted 01-19-2000 11:51 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

LMBO!!  Thanks for the laughs!
Gemini
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15 posted 01-20-2000 12:15 AM       View Profile for Gemini   Email Gemini   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gemini

Balladeer,
You never cease to amaze me
With you stunning doses of reality.
Whether its a rollcoaster,
or simply a boaster.
You touch me
With your poetry.
Much thanks.  
Toerag
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16 posted 01-20-2000 10:32 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Good response Mike....and unlike mine...it's not fiction....By the way, I can't write poetry, or make "pottery"....
Sunshine
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17 posted 01-20-2000 11:16 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

What a "ruesponse..." ROTFLOL!

 Sunshine
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LngJhnAg
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18 posted 01-20-2000 12:19 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Great poems 'Deer.


Andrew Scott
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19 posted 01-20-2000 12:38 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

L I B!
Dar it B!
Balladeer's
Wurst poetree

Butt that still b some gud wordin' yal' put dwn.

Yo Marilyn: Yep I tuk a hit or three in the cherry patch, but it made for some dang good pie.  Perhaps some day I'll go back to that hollowed ground and pay my respects to all the veggies that lost their peels in that horrible war.  How I remember it like it were just four months ago... Lt. Lucie... Special Agent Mr. Cucumber... The Cabbage Patch Kids... and lets not forget Arti-choke the assassin.  How I miss them all.

Echo Rhayne
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20 posted 01-20-2000 04:01 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

LoL, this is great!!  However I never thought, hmmmm nevermind, I never think, hurts too much.  Forget I said anything hehe  Great poem!

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~


Lucie
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21 posted 01-20-2000 04:23 PM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

Do not miss me Andrew dear,
though I've been hiding, I'm still here.

I'm working on a masterpiece.
3 lines done, wonders never cease.

I may not see all that goes on
do not forget me, I'm not gone.

I'm coming back to kick some butt.
they'll all be saying "What the ...umm"..

Nan
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22 posted 01-21-2000 07:32 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I think I need a bigger eraser.......
Pepper
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23 posted 01-21-2000 10:28 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

  LOLOL
LngJhnAg
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24 posted 01-21-2000 10:55 AM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Oh how I long for the peaceful days I once knew, when Toe and 'Deer would cast longing glances at each other's poetry.

Please try to get along, fellas.

psst, 'Deer.  I think Toe is out to get you and should never be trusted.

psst, Toe.  I think 'Deer is out to get you and should never be trusted.
 
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