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fc
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since 2000-01-18
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0 posted 2000-01-19 02:14 PM


they say it helps to write

they say it helps if you can word the problem
carefully, letter by letter dissecting the pain,
alphabetizing the reasons for the tears
so that it makes perfect sense and
the reader can so clearly see
the necessity
to hurt like you have never hurt before
or will again
and why the sunglasses are needed
to hide the river of tears
and shade the haunting desire to
just give in and follow the river down
to the sea
...and they say writing helps?
but you
taught me
other uses for the alphabet
and I don't want to use it now to explain
why I cry
this is not your fault you know?
that I love you.
that you are incredible.
that you are the man I have always
dreamed of
always wanted to hold...
so caring and passionate
and so not mine.
it is not my fault either
that I am not what you need.
that I am not the woman of your dreams
that I don't spin your desires
and inspire your rockets to launch...
I am just me
A
B
C
D
E
F
G


© Copyright 2000 fc - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
1 posted 2000-01-19 02:27 PM


Another great work from you...impressive  
Local Rebel
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since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia
2 posted 2000-01-19 02:45 PM


I think this one deserves an A!

well done fc... hope writing does help  

Nate Dogg
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since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton
3 posted 2000-01-19 03:46 PM


Wow! You sound very angry on this piece. Great job!

 Nathan

fc
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 130

4 posted 2000-01-19 03:52 PM


thanks all, won't be back for a bit, guess I need a break from life period, but will take one from thinking and writing in lieu of the first option ....
but thank you all for your kindness

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
5 posted 2000-01-19 04:43 PM


A beautiful expression of your longing.  I know what you mean i've been thru this so many times another unmutual attraction.  James
Denise
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6 posted 2000-01-19 07:39 PM


WOW! This is a great expression on pain and longing. Well done!
JTF
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since 1999-08-09
Posts 319
France
7 posted 2000-01-20 09:36 AM



FreeByrd
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since 1999-11-03
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8 posted 2000-01-20 10:23 AM


Another incredible piece.


fc
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 130

9 posted 2000-01-20 11:19 AM


thanks all, can't help but sigh when I reread my own poem...lol....love that hug JTF
Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
10 posted 2000-01-20 03:38 PM


WoW, deep, you said it all and so much more!!


 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~



One Who Understands
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since 2000-01-20
Posts 251
Cedar Rapids, Iowa
11 posted 2000-01-20 04:00 PM


Wonderfull, It was like I was reading my own voice.  Its not often, I can relate so well with what someone else has to say.  You put your feelings into words so well...Bravo...if I wore a hat, I would take it off, and then put it back on, and take it off agian in honor of that piece...
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