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fc
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0 posted 01-19-2000 02:14 PM       View Profile for fc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for fc

they say it helps to write

they say it helps if you can word the problem
carefully, letter by letter dissecting the pain,
alphabetizing the reasons for the tears
so that it makes perfect sense and
the reader can so clearly see
the necessity
to hurt like you have never hurt before
or will again
and why the sunglasses are needed
to hide the river of tears
and shade the haunting desire to
just give in and follow the river down
to the sea
...and they say writing helps?
but you
taught me
other uses for the alphabet
and I don't want to use it now to explain
why I cry
this is not your fault you know?
that I love you.
that you are incredible.
that you are the man I have always
dreamed of
always wanted to hold...
so caring and passionate
and so not mine.
it is not my fault either
that I am not what you need.
that I am not the woman of your dreams
that I don't spin your desires
and inspire your rockets to launch...
I am just me
A
B
C
D
E
F
G

© Copyright 2000 fc - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
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1 posted 01-19-2000 02:27 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Another great work from you...impressive  
Local Rebel
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since 12-21-1999
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2 posted 01-19-2000 02:45 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

I think this one deserves an A!

well done fc... hope writing does help  
Nate Dogg
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3 posted 01-19-2000 03:46 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Wow! You sound very angry on this piece. Great job!

 Nathan
fc
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4 posted 01-19-2000 03:52 PM       View Profile for fc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fc

thanks all, won't be back for a bit, guess I need a break from life period, but will take one from thinking and writing in lieu of the first option ....
but thank you all for your kindness
JamesMichael
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5 posted 01-19-2000 04:43 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

A beautiful expression of your longing.  I know what you mean i've been thru this so many times another unmutual attraction.  James
Denise
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6 posted 01-19-2000 07:39 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

WOW! This is a great expression on pain and longing. Well done!
JTF
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7 posted 01-20-2000 09:36 AM       View Profile for JTF   Email JTF   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for JTF

FreeByrd
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8 posted 01-20-2000 10:23 AM       View Profile for FreeByrd   Email FreeByrd   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit FreeByrd's Home Page   View IP for FreeByrd

Another incredible piece.

fc
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9 posted 01-20-2000 11:19 AM       View Profile for fc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fc

thanks all, can't help but sigh when I reread my own poem...lol....love that hug JTF
Echo Rhayne
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10 posted 01-20-2000 03:38 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

WoW, deep, you said it all and so much more!!


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One Who Understands
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11 posted 01-20-2000 04:00 PM       View Profile for One Who Understands   Email One Who Understands   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for One Who Understands

Wonderfull, It was like I was reading my own voice.  Its not often, I can relate so well with what someone else has to say.  You put your feelings into words so well...Bravo...if I wore a hat, I would take it off, and then put it back on, and take it off agian in honor of that piece...
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