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fc
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0 posted 01-19-2000 09:33 AM       View Profile for fc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for fc

the sign read
> > FUNERAL
> > Come Any Time
> > Services Held Round the Clock.

these days almost any attire
will do for a funeral
but out of respect, she wore black
from her head to her soul.
the gravesite was hastily prepared
for it happened so suddenly
she was taken quite unaware.
Her footsteps faltered, and stopped
as she fought to hold on
to something already gone
but anger reached out
slapped her in the face
and pushed her through the door
silence took her half the way
there, and took the seat beside her
but for the service
she took grief by the arm
as she made her way down the aisle
she needed, I guess, a bit of strength
to view the deceased.
the burial was quick, but she stayed
until it was completely over
afraid, once again to face the door.
the headstone, she thought, unnecessary, for
the words were carved deep in her soul
"herein lies my heart"



[This message has been edited by fc (edited 01-19-2000).]
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whiskey
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1 posted 01-19-2000 09:40 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

This is very good but sad   I could feel the emotion pouring from it
Local Rebel
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2 posted 01-19-2000 09:44 AM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Again another poignant and insightful work fc.  Your writing is astounding.  The way you reveal your feelings is majestic in it's simplicity.  

[This message has been edited by Local Rebel (edited 01-19-2000).]
fc
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3 posted 01-19-2000 09:49 AM       View Profile for fc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fc

jsut wish it was as simple as writing a poem to fix in reality....but thanks for the compliments
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4 posted 01-19-2000 10:00 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

In a castle dark or a fortress strong
With chains upon my feet
You know that ghost is me
And I will never be set free
As long as I'm a ghost that you can't see.

HUSG sweetheart

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.

simplyYRREHS
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5 posted 01-19-2000 10:04 AM       View Profile for simplyYRREHS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for simplyYRREHS

fc...you have breezed in here and taken us all!  the style of your writing, the powerful emotions you are able to uncover and verbally play them in our heads...i'm simply wow'd.  great, great poem.

Sherry

 "Heaven is under our feet as well as over our heads." ~Henry David Thoreau


fc
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6 posted 01-19-2000 10:17 AM       View Profile for fc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fc

yep rainbow, you were right, if no one else but you and me....it fits perfect...thank you...hugs back

thank you sherry....glad you like
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7 posted 01-19-2000 10:55 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

So many phrases grabbed my heart... but I can't pick a favorite from a poignant whole... just say WOW!
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8 posted 01-19-2000 11:26 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Applauding!!! Rest assured, with the two from you I have seen, I will be looking forward to many more. Excellent writing  

 At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet. ~Plato
fc
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9 posted 01-19-2000 02:05 PM       View Profile for fc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fc

thanks again
suthern a wow from you means a lot
hoot...your applause makes me smile
Nan
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10 posted 01-19-2000 05:56 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I must say, fc - You're quite a master at the use of imagery: personification, metaphor, extended metaphor... they're all there - in quite an astounding message... Do keep those posts coming....
fc
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11 posted 01-19-2000 06:52 PM       View Profile for fc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fc

lol finally got a smile out of me, thanks nan....but no, I am a master at none, can't even remember what most of those things are...lol...I just write poems in my head when my feet can't sleep, this one was born under the stars at 2 in the morning
JTF
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12 posted 01-20-2000 09:46 AM       View Profile for JTF   Email JTF   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for JTF

Outstanding poem fc ... I wish it were not a true story and I could just enjoy your talent ... HUGS
JTF
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13 posted 01-20-2000 09:48 AM       View Profile for JTF   Email JTF   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for JTF

Great post Rainbow .. you're a priceless friend ..  
fc
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14 posted 01-20-2000 11:41 AM       View Profile for fc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fc

well can't leave here today without saying thanks JTF and leaving a ditto on your last post....that she is, that she is.....
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15 posted 01-20-2000 12:20 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This one tore at my heart...you have my sympathies.  Excellent writing.

Denise

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Martie
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16 posted 01-20-2000 01:52 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

This is such a strong and emotional poem.  Excellent Writing!
devina
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17 posted 01-20-2000 02:32 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

This is a reality I wish I'd never been through.  I've never heard such heartache put so beautifully I must say.  You definantly have a way with words!! HUGS!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
 
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