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azzhu #5 (revisited)

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Ama Zhu Zhu
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0 posted 01-18-2000 03:57 PM       View Profile for Ama Zhu Zhu   Email Ama Zhu Zhu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ama Zhu Zhu

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I remember the first time I took you in
you said I had your mother's hands
for me it was my father's touch
again




 azzhu



[This message has been edited by Ama Zhu Zhu (edited 01-18-2000).]
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Kevin Taylor
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1 posted 01-19-2000 12:22 AM       View Profile for Kevin Taylor   Email Kevin Taylor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kevin Taylor's Home Page   View IP for Kevin Taylor

Wow! The poem is ambiguous but I can't help feeling like I got hit by a train with it.
Serious talent. I've read this one before and it is not diminished in effect the second time around.


 Kevin

"Poetry is, at once, what you get... and how you got there."

hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 01-19-2000 12:30 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Wow...this packs a punch in 24 words
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3 posted 01-19-2000 02:09 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Ouch. Is it just me, or do these words point to a character remembering incest? Maybe I'm way overboard, but wow, powerful poem.

Mike
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4 posted 01-19-2000 02:20 AM       View Profile for Saxoness   Email Saxoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saxoness

wow.
let me say it again.
wow.

 "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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5 posted 01-19-2000 02:35 AM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

How do you manage to conquer an entire story in such a short line of words?  I see incest too, and from memory, I huddle down and shudder.  

Excellently written, to evoke such feelings with so few words, no matter what it's truly about.

This is only the second poem I have ever seen of yours, and I am amazed at both.



 ...Living is ever like crossing rivers; finding a new life on each shore ... RJG


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