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Yesterday's Earthen Eyes

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Meadowmuse
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0 posted 01-18-2000 12:32 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse



Yesterday's Earthen Eyes



And the clouds are being swept across the silent sapphire sky
and the spoken words, onced savored, fail to follow.
What began as pulsing promise, now deceptions underly
and no longer will I look toward tomorrow.

For there's no more life within me for your shadow to erode.
What was once my heartbeat's rhythm hammers hollow.
And yesterday's earthen eyes from which, my love, devotion flowed,
face the sundown soiled with streaming tears of sorrow.

Dear LadyClaire





[This message has been edited by Meadowmuse (edited 01-18-2000).]
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Justbleu
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1 posted 01-18-2000 01:13 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Oh Claire...this is sooo sad!!  I really enjoyed and liked this poem!!  I often feel much sorrow!!  Sometimes to cope I just bury it to get through a day and to make sure my feet go one in front of the other!!  This is what it made me think of!!

Take Care
Bridgette
Danny Holloway
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2 posted 01-18-2000 01:33 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Hello, I am trying to be a student of style and I want to say I especially enjoy yours in this poem.  Touching!!!
DH

 
Martie
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3 posted 01-18-2000 01:39 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Silent Sapphire skies--oh, you do know how to put three words together and make them sing.  This poem is so full of sad emotion and very well done.
Denise
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4 posted 01-18-2000 03:12 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I agree! This is excellent, Claire!

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~

hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 01-18-2000 03:17 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Absolutely beautiful...very well written Claire
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6 posted 01-18-2000 04:10 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

"...rhythm hammers hollow..."   All I can say is Wow...this is exquisitely written and in riveting style!  My father reads alot of your works, and just the other night, was telling me how GOOD you are - I see now that I need to devote much more of my time online to you!  hehe  I don't get to read nearly as much as I'd like to.  If all your stuff is this good, I should go back and catch up on some!  

 ** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000!
Parker
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7 posted 01-18-2000 04:43 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Claire,  
I've injoyed you poems so much, since
I found this lovely place, of friends. You are such a word smith. How long have you been writing, if this is just a new talent of yours i'll be really really pissed.  
Meadowmuse
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8 posted 01-18-2000 06:55 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Bridgette...yes, it's that sorrow that often produces the most beautiful work, I think. Thanks for reading and responding today.

Danny...thank you. I read a wonderful piece of yours just a bit ago and you're definitely headed down the right poetic path!

Martie...thank you, Martie. Such a kind response! So glad you enjoyed this one.

Denise...thanks so much for reading and letting me know that you enjoyed.

Hoot Owl...as always, thank you for your commentary...(still working on that wav file!)  

Femme...I'm glad you found something to enjoy with this piece, and thanks to your father for his comment (by proxy  ) I know exactly what you mean about not being able to read all the poetry that you'd like...there is so much fine work here! I try to get by here with a cup of tea whenever I can during the day, and nearly always for a bit in the evening, and STILL cannot find time to read all the works!

Haleyja...I'm still smiling at your remark! Very cute! I thank you for reading and responding to this piece. I've been writing since um, well, I guess since the beginning of time...but just recently (relatively speaking) retired my chisel, hammer and stone tablets for a keyboard. I've still got them, just in case this newfangled keyboard thing doesn't work out.  

Dear LadyClaire


Alwye
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9 posted 01-18-2000 09:18 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Oh wow, Meadowmuse...stunningly sad this is. I felt this so much that it brought tears to my eyes.  Thank you for sharing such an elegant and well done piece with us.

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha

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10 posted 01-18-2000 09:29 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

MeadowMuse-

I not only liked this poem
very much ...
your sense of humor A~muses~ me.
Great work, gal.

~*Marge*~

 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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PhaerieChild
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11 posted 01-20-2000 02:18 AM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

Very sad but so well imparted!! Your muse is working very well these days. Your sense of humour ain't too shabby either lol. Love the poem.

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho


Elizabeth Santos
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12 posted 01-20-2000 08:27 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

I'm almost speachless with the beauty of this poem. It should certainly be published along with many of your fine poems
I hope to see it in print some day
Liz

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 01-20-2000).]
Meadowmuse
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13 posted 01-20-2000 04:37 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Krista, Marge, Shawna, Elizabeth...thank you ALL for reading, and for offering such encouraging responses. Awfully nice. I think this piece, though brief, is one of my own favorites. Glad you all enjoyed it.  

Dear LadyClaire

HelmutB
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14 posted 01-21-2000 08:44 AM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

If words can cut like a knife
If words can paint a picture
If words can describe what feelings can't hide
If words can say what the heart can't divide
You have done it here
Very sadly do, my dear
My heart goes out to you here

Beautiful

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Skyfyre
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15 posted 01-21-2000 01:34 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

The manner in which you say so much with so little is a testament to your talent.  Well done, Claire!  

--Kess


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

Meadowmuse
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16 posted 01-22-2000 07:56 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Helmut...Your heart has a comforting way, my friend. Thank you.

Skyfyre...Thank you for your kindness and for reading my work in the first place.

Claire
Grandma Jo
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wonderfully done but oh, so sad. Loved the poem.
 
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