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What remained was you

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Seymour Tabin
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  What remained was you

She came to me from shadows
Where on the wall they dwell.
Danced across the floors meadow
From where the shadows fell.

The magic from down under,
Seemed to make them come alive.
And I stay in wonders wonder,
At the splendor and the drive.

Illusion took my hand in heart,
And I rose and danced with her
To the magic it impart,
In a shadow waltz of blur.

And scented myrrh came to bloom
Filled the room from sky to floor
And ecstasy did consume,
For my heart could fill no more.

And when the scene did dim from view,
The only thought remained, was you.
© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth Santos
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1 posted 01-18-2000 11:20 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sy,
What remains is another exquisite poem to add to the collection, and I'm adding this one to mine
Love
Liz
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on the threshold of a dream


2 posted 01-18-2000 11:22 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Beautiful, Seymour... especially the last 2 lines... they leave me with a happy sigh. *S*
Martie
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3 posted 01-18-2000 11:35 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

So lovely Sy and the last line really got my heart.
Denise
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4 posted 01-18-2000 12:07 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Ahhhhh....this is so precious and tender, Sy! I love the way it made me feel!!

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~

Justbleu
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5 posted 01-18-2000 01:09 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

I absolutely loved the sweet feeling this gave me!!  Very nice, SY!!

Take Care
Bridgette
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"For my heart could fill no more"...beautiful poem, Seymour...I feel as though my heart would burst, reading such a wonderful poem.

Always enjoy your work!  

 May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

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Andrew Scott
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7 posted 01-18-2000 01:48 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Sir Tabin: What a nice view of something that is usually treated with dark intent. My compliments for a piece well done.
Pepper
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Sy,
I'm 'sighing' again....this is beautiful! And like Suthern and Martie, your last line touched my heart too..

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon


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9 posted 01-18-2000 04:06 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

When the title of the poem drags a reader in,
and when the words drip from Sy's own pen,
never ask the whereof on the trip he takes you on,
only ask the Lord he ne'er lets Sy be gone.

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


HelmutB
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10 posted 01-18-2000 04:23 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Very nice the poem I read
almost a tear I shead
I do have a similar one
That as a shadow (so it's title)begun
I can relate so much to this
Poetry is sure bliss
Ps Yours is better



 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.  



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hoot_owl_rn
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Absolutely beautiful!!!!!
Seymour Tabin
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Elizabeth,
You are the sweetest Elizabeth I know. Love sy.
Suthern,
Well then happy sighs to you. *L* Sy
Martie,
That was my aim, thank you. *L* Sy
Denise,
You make me feel the same way with your answers. *L* Sy
Just,
thank you so much for the very nice.
Satiate,
Wonderful words, thank you.
Andrew,
Thank you for the well done.
Pepper,
It's always delightful to touch a heart. *L*
Sunshine,
For the wonderful answer you get two *L* *L*
Helmut,
You are a faithful reader, thank you.
Hoot,
You are my very favorite Owl. *L* Sy
Tamera
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13 posted 01-18-2000 07:58 PM       View Profile for Tamera   Email Tamera   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tamera

Sy,
so beautiful..and I did shed a tear!
Tamera
Alwye
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14 posted 01-18-2000 09:36 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Ahh, exactly....this is incredibly beautiful..I love it Sy.     Keep it up!

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha

Marge Tindal
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15 posted 01-18-2000 09:45 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Seymour-

This is extremely lovely.
I believe I smell the fragrance
of the scented myrrh in bloom.

Such romance from
such a romantic heart.
Love ~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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