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Cold eyes imploring...

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For_Never
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0 posted 01-17-2000 11:02 PM       View Profile for For_Never   Email For_Never   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for For_Never

Cold eyes imploring;

And I come upon her lie
Her voice as soft as thunder..
Feeling lost in plain sight
In the darkness reigns her name
Beauty lost to most I see
just like flowers blossoming in the rain


Somewhere in my burning night
She flickers in to veiw
So yet somewhere in my fields of pain
There are flowers blossoming in the rain

Yet I cry to live a bit more..
For just a moment I feel that brutal truth
Just for once

to make quick these feelings I often feign

And, to see the flowers blossoming in the rain



 For a fateful night of passion, since my heart need one last vent, I believe I am willing to pay that black widows rent...
© Copyright 2000 Edward A. Beerman - All Rights Reserved
catslair
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1 posted 01-17-2000 11:08 PM       View Profile for catslair   Email catslair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for catslair

loved this........and the last line just finished it off beautifully....
Meadowmuse
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2 posted 01-17-2000 11:09 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

An interesting albeit curious piece.   I enjoyed your "blossoming in the rain" metaphorical imagery.

Dear LadyClaire
devina
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3 posted 01-17-2000 11:59 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

You have some great imagery in this poem.  It's funny how the hurt brings out the best in your talent! Cheer up you romantic poet!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Justbleu
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4 posted 01-18-2000 12:02 AM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

I loved the last line "flowers blossoming in the rain", beautiful images and sad!! Keep on writing!!

Take Care
Bridgette
hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 01-18-2000 01:24 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

I love the final line to, what a great conclusion to this piece  
Echo Rhayne
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6 posted 01-18-2000 04:25 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Beautiful and I 'echo' the above statements!

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~


JennyLee
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7 posted 01-18-2000 09:54 AM       View Profile for JennyLee   Email JennyLee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JennyLee

Excellent For_Never.
I love the second stanza  


Jenny


 Words bloom like flowers that seem astonished at being born.

L. Pirandello
16th Century Dramatist

Isis
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8 posted 01-18-2000 05:50 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Beautiful as always Edward  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)

For_Never
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9 posted 01-19-2000 01:49 AM       View Profile for For_Never   Email For_Never   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for For_Never

Thank you all, I hope to find the hidden beauty...I now know it is there...I just have to open my eyes...


 For a fateful night of passion, since my heart need one last vent, I believe I am willing to pay that black widows rent...
bsquirrel
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10 posted 01-19-2000 02:02 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

A difficult but rewarding poem. I love the recurring image, too. I'm just imagining a cluster of flowers weighed down in mud, leaves glistening, crumbs of dirt darkening and sliding down the leaves, stems pushing forward, down ... well, you get the idea.  

Mike
 
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