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azzhu #7

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Ama Zhu Zhu
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0 posted 01-17-2000 10:46 PM       View Profile for Ama Zhu Zhu   Email Ama Zhu Zhu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ama Zhu Zhu

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absent
I hear you chanting
my names

"I'm 'a love you with the back of my hand
baby love you with the back of my hand
gonna..."

fade to grief



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Mike
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1 posted 01-17-2000 11:35 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

I find myself liking this even though it is totally foreign to what I usually write and read.  
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2 posted 01-17-2000 11:43 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Wow, very powerful! You definitely understand the power of few words. It's almost like a haiku, the way it gets under your skin. Write more! Please?

Mike
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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3 posted 01-18-2000 01:34 AM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

Absolutely unique - this one has me hunched over in a ball of shuddering, and sorrow.  This one tells a poignant story; a lifetime in such few words.  It's the first one I've seen of yours.  I'll be watching for more...
kaleidoscope
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4 posted 01-18-2000 02:03 AM       View Profile for kaleidoscope   Email kaleidoscope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaleidoscope

It's in the scarcity of your words that the power is found.  Such remorse, no relief - it says it all in the words "... fade to grief".  
WolfsMate
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5 posted 01-18-2000 02:16 AM       View Profile for WolfsMate   Email WolfsMate   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for WolfsMate

So much said in so few words!! Excellent!
hoot_owl_rn
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I am very impressed with your style, you have a way of making a very deep inpact with just a few words. Nicely done  
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