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Supplication |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
SupplicationBring forth the rage, the demon dark dogs Bring them to feed in my tombs Shred my face bloody, peel skin from my skull Pry open my raw sickened wounds Bring forth the illness, the mad lusting death Fetch me the fingers of pity Summon the spasms of sanity lost Just leave me to rot in this city  Claire |
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catslair Junior Member
since 2000-01-16
Posts 48 |
wow!! claire...this is very powerful writing here........hot me like a bullet.....loved it..thanks |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Hi, Claire. I see you're well into the "anger" stage of grieving. Here's hoping you get through that part of it soon, because it's a healthy place to be for a li'l while, but soon grows toxic and hollowing. Great poem, by the way. Take care. Mike |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Hi Mike, and thanks....but it's just a poem, written 'long time ago.  Claire |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Still in shock......a strong effect this one has. But then I think that was the point. Seems to cry out for pain to come. Full effect in motion here Drive it like you stole it...LOL And another thing...When I rev my engine I want people to think the world is coming to a end....hehehe |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
First Knight...interesting response...thanks for reading. Yes, this was written with bitterness as the parchment and pain as the ink. Claire |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Very dark Muse... but a talented expression of real emotion... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow...very powerful piece! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I agree! Very powerful portrayal of a dark mood, indeed! Well done, Claire! Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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simplyYRREHS Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 162 |
Initial reaction..."YIKES". Reaction after reading again..."YIKES, still". Thought after chewing for a few minutes..."Very strong, very natural, very much a stage of life" So much emotion wrapped up in choice of words ~ That's great writing! Enjoyed! Sherry"Heaven is under our feet as well as over our heads." ~Henry David Thoreau |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Ah... talk about a bad hair day. Feel sorry for the guy who got hit with this one! Glad it was a long time ago and you're feeling better now. Did I say this was strong stuff? |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Powerful = yes scared me = yes Hope you don't actually feel this way If so Here is a hug to make you feel better Here is a laugh to make you smile Here is a hand to help Here is a friend on whom you can depend A strong poem The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Local Rebel...thank you for reading this. Darkness and bitterness are, at times, somewhat too real, aren't they? Hoot Owl...thanks for reading and for the "powerful" response. Denise...thank you, as well, for reading and kind commentary. Sherry...thanks for reading and rereading and taking the time to chew and respond. Andrew...thank you. Actually this didn't "hit" anything but my keyboard. My editor's a fast ducker. Helmut...thank you, didn't mean to frighten you (or anyone). And thank you for the hugs, hands, laughter, smiles, and friendship...such welcomed gifts of the heart. Claire |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Quite a powerful poem you have here Claire WoW ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Methinks you got more than just a few aggressions out on this one, Claire... |
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