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Meadowmuse
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Supplication


Bring forth the rage, the demon dark dogs
Bring them to feed in my tombs
Shred my face bloody, peel skin from my skull
Pry open my raw sickened wounds

Bring forth the illness, the mad lusting death
Fetch me the fingers of pity
Summon the spasms of sanity lost
Just leave me to rot in this city


Dear LadyClaire



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catslair
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1 posted 01-17-2000 11:10 PM       View Profile for catslair   Email catslair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for catslair

wow!! claire...this is very powerful writing here........hot me like a bullet.....loved it..thanks
bsquirrel
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2 posted 01-17-2000 11:55 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Hi, Claire. I see you're well into the "anger" stage of grieving. Here's hoping you get through that part of it soon, because it's a healthy place to be for a li'l while, but soon grows toxic and hollowing. Great poem, by the way. Take care.

Mike
Meadowmuse
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3 posted 01-18-2000 12:15 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Hi Mike, and thanks....but it's just a poem, written 'long time ago.  

Claire
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4 posted 01-18-2000 02:47 AM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

Still in shock......a strong effect this one has.   But then I think that was the point.  Seems to cry out for pain to come.  Full effect in motion here

 Drive it like you stole it...LOL And another thing...When I rev my engine I want people to think the world is coming to a end....hehehe


Meadowmuse
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First Knight...interesting response...thanks for reading. Yes, this was written with bitterness as the parchment and pain as the ink.

Claire
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6 posted 01-18-2000 09:12 AM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Very dark Muse...

but a talented expression of real emotion...
hoot_owl_rn
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Wow...very powerful piece!
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8 posted 01-18-2000 11:33 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I agree! Very powerful portrayal of a dark mood, indeed! Well done, Claire!

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~

simplyYRREHS
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9 posted 01-18-2000 11:36 AM       View Profile for simplyYRREHS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for simplyYRREHS

Initial reaction..."YIKES".
Reaction after reading again..."YIKES, still".
Thought after chewing for a few minutes..."Very strong, very natural, very much a stage of life"

So much emotion wrapped up in choice of words ~ That's great writing!  Enjoyed!

Sherry

 "Heaven is under our feet as well as over our heads." ~Henry David Thoreau


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10 posted 01-18-2000 02:59 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Ah... talk about a bad hair day. Feel sorry for the guy who got hit with this one!   Glad it was a long time ago and you're feeling better now. Did I say this was strong stuff?

HelmutB
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11 posted 01-18-2000 04:36 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Powerful = yes
scared me  = yes
Hope you don't actually feel this way
If so
Here is a hug to make you feel better
Here is a laugh to make you smile
Here is a hand to help
Here is a friend on whom you can depend
A strong poem

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Meadowmuse
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Local Rebel...thank you for reading this. Darkness and bitterness are, at times, somewhat too real, aren't they?  

Hoot Owl...thanks for reading and for the "powerful" response.  

Denise...thank you, as well, for reading and kind commentary.  

Sherry...thanks for reading and rereading and taking the time to chew and respond.  

Andrew...thank you. Actually this didn't "hit" anything but my keyboard. My editor's a fast ducker.  

Helmut...thank you, didn't mean to frighten you (or anyone). And thank you for the hugs, hands, laughter, smiles, and friendship...such welcomed gifts of the heart.  

Dear LadyClaire

Echo Rhayne
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13 posted 01-18-2000 11:04 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Quite a powerful poem you have here Claire WoW

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~


Nan
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14 posted 01-19-2000 07:37 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Methinks you got more than just a few aggressions out on this one, Claire...
 
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