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Mountain Brook |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Backpacking in the mountains high, Up in the clouds, where land meets sky, I came upon a dancing brook, As hiked along in heaven's nook. Down mountain's side in headlong race, From snowcapped peaks of pure white grace, To valley floor down far below, Where beaver's dam, stops stream's wild flow. Unbroken sheen; clear crystal glass, Reflecting peaks of mountain's pass, Ringed by aspens, with rock lined shore, As stand atop, at God's front door. From virgin snow, to tranquil lake, While in between, wild path does take, I stand and ponder little brook, And of the journey that it took. [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 01-17-2000).] |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Mike! You are so good. I loved this..it was a breath of fresh air to me! (dam not damn) Thanks for taking me along on your trek!  |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Oh, this is beautiful, Mike!! So that's where ya been, huh?! Well guess what? Ya just took me there too!! Simply beautiful!  Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Mike, to ponder in poetry the brook's path...very nice. I enjoyed the reverie...thank you. Claire |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
This talked to me very well....it reminded me of back home in Alaska....I just moved to Oregon a couple of months ago!! I also love to hike...thank you for the reading!! Take Care Bridgette |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thanks for the hike |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lovely place this place--you took me there with your words but I wish I was really there. |
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catslair Junior Member
since 2000-01-16
Posts 48 |
great imagery here...i found it delightful....thanks.... |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Hey I was enjoying that, I want to go back! I guess I can just read it again Ejoyed it greatly!! Thanks!~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
This reminds me of mountains just about 10 from home. Right now they are snowcovered and pristine. Can't wait til spring to go watch the dancing brook. Thanks for a gentle hike. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mike- Worth the hike. To wade within the 'dancing brook' I paused and found myself high upon the mountain ... how did I get here? Your words 'back-packed' me I think. This entire piece flows as gently as the stream down the mountain. Thank you for sharing this gem. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Thank you all for your very gracious comments. Not many mountains here in Kansas, but I do enjoy my trips to Colorado. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Found one or two of those special places in the mountains myself. Ya gotta love the way they inspire. Nice work here Mike. |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I saw that same mountain stream in the Grand Tetons.... simply awesome!! |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
I always wanted to see the mountains, though never had the possibility (yet). Thanks for taking me there. : ) Wonderful poem Mike ! |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
This is a beautiful place to go to! I enjoyed it very much. SEA |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Certainly a nice way to describe a hiking trip. Very good The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Thank you kindly Andrew, Nan, Munda (come visit our mountains anytime)and Helmut. I consider it an honor to receive your first post SEA... thank you. Just a tip though Munda, when you make it to mountains, don't try to go wading, the water is ice cold. |
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