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Sometime... (a love poem ;)

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Kevin Taylor
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since 12-23-1999
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near Vancouver, BC, Canada


0 posted 01-17-2000 02:35 PM       View Profile for Kevin Taylor   Email Kevin Taylor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Kevin Taylor's Home Page   View IP for Kevin Taylor

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the life-sap that rises washing winter from my veins
inebriates me
as i feel my wooden fingers grow
alive again beneath your sunset-green umbrella of love
and as i stand here leaf-blind
my tree-soul-self sees and i admire
the aura of your birchbark skin
all grace-white and delicate
and i want to wend my poetry
along those branches
branches that blow
branches that tend
branches that cradle
the wind
branches that bend the sky
upward
for me to grow into

but whenever i try to reach you
i can't
and that leaves me feeling
wood-cut and dark
thoughts petrify my rising sap
into amber crystals that
fall to the ground
and each crystal of
frustration becomes a
precious stone because within is
trapped a tear of love for you

and we sleep side by side by side
and never touch
as our roots tangle in the under-earth
while my grizzled bark
and oaken amber
grows old and maybe we
can be a chair together
sometime





 Kevin

"Poetry is, at once, what you get... and how you got there."

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Justbleu
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1 posted 01-17-2000 03:06 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

I liked this a lot...I loved the imagery!!

Take Care
Bridgette
Sunshine
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2 posted 01-17-2000 03:33 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

This had the true sound and timbre of an age old soul whose gnarled hands once knew the silken threads of love now gone.

I truly saw Poetry in Motion in this piece.  Bravo, Sir!

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
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Glen Hope, PA USA


3 posted 01-17-2000 03:42 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Beautiful imagery Kevin
Denise
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4 posted 01-17-2000 09:07 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Wonderful, Kevin! I really enjoyed this and the ending was excellent!

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~

lucky
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5 posted 01-18-2000 12:31 AM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lucky

this is exceptionll, i love the part wher you project "
dark
thoughts petrify my rising sap
into amber crystals that
fall to the ground
and each crystal of
frustration becomes a
precious stone because within is
trapped a tear of love...
this is very nice.
Lucky
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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6 posted 01-18-2000 01:01 AM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

Oh, this poem touched the very beat of my heart;  your lines "the life-sap that rises washing winter from my veins inebriates me
as i feel my wooden fingers grow alive again beneath your sunset-green umbrella of love", are my favorite, but it was hard to find the best - I feel your words through and through.

Unique, poignant, heart-wrenching, this poem stands alone in perceptive and haunting excellence.
amber
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since 06-15-99
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7 posted 01-18-2000 05:12 AM       View Profile for amber   Email amber   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for amber

I love your word usage and the analogy here.  You're definantly a man with talent!!!  This uniqueness is something we need here in passions!

 Only after trying so hard to let go, did i realize how much i wanted to hold you forever> Amber and Ellis forever and always

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8 posted 01-18-2000 07:23 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Kevin Taylor-

The beauty of your words
has grabbed me by the heartstrings.

The imagery of the branches
and limbs intertwining leaves
me with the desire to see you
two also become a well-made chair
sometime, somewhere.

Once in a while someone reaches
for our hand ... and touches our
heart.  You have certainly done
just that.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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lucky
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9 posted 01-28-2000 07:06 AM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lucky

K,

This touched my very being kevin;  the lines, "life-sap that rises washing winter", are excellent, I have felt your words for quite some time now. Unique and as always... wrenching. Definantly minced with awesome talent..!  This uniqueness is something everyone needs to notice here at passions.
lucky
Elizabeth Santos
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10 posted 01-28-2000 08:26 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Very unique and beautiful poem
I love it!
Liz
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11 posted 01-28-2000 08:33 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

                  

This poem deserves all them smiles for your poem put a gigantic one upon my mind, soul, and last but not least my face.
Koon
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since 01-27-2000
Posts 45
Singapore


12 posted 01-28-2000 08:42 AM       View Profile for Koon   Email Koon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Koon

This poem is so beautiful....at least someone out there feels the same way as I do.
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