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In your Sky

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First__Knight
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0 posted 01-17-2000 07:49 AM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for First__Knight

In your Sky
~First Knight~


Skies were dark when I started the flight,
Deep in the seat with my hands gripped tight.
Bump a bump the wind did make,
Currents of change decide my fate.

Forecast was clear and clouds did fade,
I've been here before this trip I've made.
I stand now in the door way out,
Shaking with fear, full of doubt.

Ready to jump. I've checked my gear,
Jumpmaster said you've nothing to fear.
Making this step requires much more,
More than just stepping out the door.

I jumped
      into the sky
           that's you,
              Without a prayer,
                    upon your cue.
               I took that leap
         and said the word,
   "I love you Dear"  
           was all you heard.
                I said those words,
                      You wanted to hear
                "I love you Darling",  
           I love you Dear"
     Took a chance,
           releasing my heart,
                 Jumping in love,
                       making that start.
                    But I was saved
                as you replied
           "I love you too",
     "My fear has died."

With those sweet words my chute deployed,
In your winds of love, my heart overjoyed.
I softly fall to the ground below,
Forever in love, Which will always grow.



 Drive it like you stole it...LOL And another thing...When I rev my engine I want people to think the world is coming to a end....hehehe


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catslair
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1 posted 01-17-2000 09:11 AM       View Profile for catslair   Email catslair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for catslair

cherish what you have and do not think about the what not's.....you are very lucky indeed.......
whiskey
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2 posted 01-17-2000 09:16 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

This is wonderful First_knight I really like it , another great one from you  
Denise
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3 posted 01-17-2000 12:29 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

David, this is so beautiful! I love the formatting, too! Great analogy!

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~

Pepper
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4 posted 01-17-2000 02:25 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

I too, like the analogy you used here FK...and find the poem quite lovely...
I'd like to make a copy, with your permission..

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon


hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 01-17-2000 03:31 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

David,
   I'm not sure my words at this time can express the beauty in this poem, and to know it was written for me, makes it all the more beautiful. I absolutely love everything about it from the words to the formatting. Sometimes we have to just jump, take those chances or forever look to the skies and think about what might have been. Thank you for finding the faith and courage to jump.
Hugs  
Ruth
Tara Simms
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6 posted 01-17-2000 06:25 PM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms

Bravo! The formatting was great, it really captured the feeling of a free fall, the wind rushing beneath me, the exhiliration, the freedom!  

Oh, and congrats you two.  


 It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley


Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 01-17-2000 07:51 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

First,
Well done enjoyed the read.
HelmutB
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8 posted 01-17-2000 08:19 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

This is one of the best love poems I came across. The way you describe the leap of faith makes it looks as easy as a skydive  
Well done, very well I shall say.
I shall keep my eye on you




 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

First__Knight
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9 posted 01-17-2000 10:19 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

Thank you Catslair, Whiskey, Denise.

Of course Pepper...Honored that you would want to.

Thank you Tara this was what I tried to make it look like.

Thank you Sy....From you that means something
HelmutB..Ruth has spoke highly of you so I am glad to hear from you  

Ruth----Your are my way, my path, and my writing.  thank you for just being you and always being there  

 Drive it like you stole it...LOL And another thing...When I rev my engine I want people to think the world is coming to a end....hehehe


Marge Tindal
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10 posted 01-17-2000 11:38 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

First_Knight-

What a 'leap of faith' you've taken here.
Hoot- how about joining him in a tandem
free-fall?

Great formatting and just overall
terrific !  You go guy !  
~*Marge*~




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hoot_owl_rn
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11 posted 01-18-2000 12:00 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Marge...I think I've already jumped  
bsquirrel
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12 posted 01-18-2000 12:13 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

A great poem. The middle "free-fall" section is done so well you really do feel like you're falling -- in measured rhythms, that is. Great stuff.

Mike
First__Knight
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13 posted 01-18-2000 01:02 AM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

Thank you bsquirrel I was hoping for such an effect.

Marge....I drug her to the door to push her out and when I turn around she fell on her own....Could not possibly let her go all by herself.....LOL

 Drive it like you stole it...LOL And another thing...When I rev my engine I want people to think the world is coming to a end....hehehe


kitkat
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14 posted 01-18-2000 01:13 AM       View Profile for kitkat   Email kitkat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kitkat

First_Knight
That first leap is always a doizee. Glad to hear your chute opened. I too liked the way you formatted the feeling.
PhaerieChild
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15 posted 01-18-2000 02:59 AM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

First_Knight, I love the analogy and the formatting. Absolutely wonderful piece here! And Hoot is very blessed to have this written for her, but of course she already knows that.

BTW I really like your signature. Very cool!!

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho


First__Knight
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16 posted 01-18-2000 09:30 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

kitkat- Thank you so much

Wildchild- Thank you Wildchild.....my signature I changed to that recently to just bring a smile....

 Drive it like you stole it...LOL And another thing...When I rev my engine I want people to think the world is coming to a end....hehehe

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