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Pannin' fer Rhymes

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Kevin Taylor
since 12-23-1999
Posts 192
near Vancouver, BC, Canada

0 posted 01-17-2000 12:45 AM       View Profile for Kevin Taylor   Email Kevin Taylor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Kevin Taylor's Home Page   View IP for Kevin Taylor

Well, now,
It was sometime in the spring o' 98
Jist 'round M'morial Day 'n th' Land o' Freedom...
'er so they call it.
Anyways, I was sittin' up 'hind them hills...
Y'know, nexta where God 'n' Hell musta had
some sorta fuss 'er 'nother. Sorta desert. Sorta
An' I was pannin' fer rhymes -
I kep' comin' up dry -
when alluvasudden
straight outta the ground
there's this tinklin', twinklin', musical sound.
So I eyeballed the pan and gave her a twitch.
Some verbs an' an adjective peppered the dish.
Good stuff, I s'pose, fer a yarn they'd bin fine,
but not fer perfessional-lookers-fer-rhymes.
So I flipped em a toss an' caught 'em agin
T' see if that tinklin' mightn't be kin
t' th' one that I found t'other side o' that night.
It'd had t' be good, er it wouldn't fit right.
Them poets won't shell-out fer less than a pair
Cuz one by 'tself leaves 'em pullin' their hair.
So ya gotta find more than a couple that fit
Er poets 'll fake it 'n some 'll jist quit
An' some 'll jist hope no one says that it's... Y' know...
Call 'emselves "nou-veau" 'n claim it's legit.
'Nuffa that, I s'pose.

I look fer them twinklin' musical words that rhymes
like the first time they's ever bin heard.
I sure ain't the first one 'ats panned 'n 'em hills.
M' pappy before me turned up a few thrills
N' somewhere er 'nother done found a whole line.
But me, I ain't happy 'nless it'll rhyme.
They're there, I c'n hear 'em, jist tickle the breeze!
I'll stick it out long 's there's poets t' please.
If ya 'spected a yarn, er t' hear miners cuss -
I's pannin' fer rhymes an' not dirt 'n a dust!

Hmph, wha's 'at ya got there?


"Poetry is, at once, what you get... and how you got there."

© Copyright 2000 Kevin Taylor - All Rights Reserved
since 12-31-1999
Posts 78

1 posted 01-17-2000 12:49 AM       View Profile for Anne   Email Anne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Anne

You've struck gold with this one!
How original!
since 11-09-1999
Posts 397
California! Yeah! Okay, I'm

2 posted 01-17-2000 12:50 AM       View Profile for Astraea   Email Astraea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Astraea

Oh gosh, I loved this!  Very nicely done!  Lovely!


 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

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since 11-27-1999
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3 posted 01-17-2000 12:54 AM       View Profile for Eloise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Eloise

This is cute Kevin.  Enjoyed the read.  
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4 posted 01-17-2000 01:00 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Nothing more challenging or more rewarding in my book! This is just wonderful Kevin! I like your style! You've got a great wit!


And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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since 08-26-99
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northern mountains, Idaho

5 posted 01-17-2000 02:09 AM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

Very, very well written, and entertaining! Unique both in idea and style.   Excellent! Dale and I laughed and laughed.  Thank you!
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since 10-28-1999
Posts 3189
Northern Cali

6 posted 01-17-2000 04:32 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Cute little ditty you've struck with this one!! Enjoy your unique style!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
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7 posted 01-17-2000 07:58 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Kevin, I really like the humor, style and vernacular you've employed here...and how you begin your rhyming lines "alluvasudden" with the tinklin' twinklin' discovery of a few verbs and an  adjective. I loved reading this one aloud!

Dear LadyClaire

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