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And Yet I Die

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Marilyn
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0 posted 01-16-2000 11:17 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Marilyn

I see the stars sparkling so bright,
Within the moon kissed sky.
I hear the lark so sweetly sing,
Amidst the morning dawn.
I smell the flower full in bloom,
And see their royal pomp.

And yet some place so deep within,
I'm shrouded and I'm closed.
The brillance there I can't see,
In mists of misery.
Enshrined inside, unable thus,
To touch the warmth without.

I gaze upon this passion spent,

And yet...Inside I die.




[This message has been edited by Marilyn (edited 01-18-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Marilyn - All Rights Reserved
Astraea
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1 posted 01-16-2000 11:19 PM       View Profile for Astraea   Email Astraea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Astraea

Wow.  Lovely, and completely so.

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."


WhtDove
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2 posted 01-16-2000 11:22 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Funny how that is isn't it? When we can see the beauty all around us and just can't feel it within?  I can relate to this one!

 <*\\\><
Where there is faith,
there is love.
Where there is love,
there is peace.
Where there is peace,
there is GOD.
Where there is GOD,
there is no need.

Hallmark


Isis
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3 posted 01-16-2000 11:24 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Marilyn this is wonderful, something different for you, me likes a lot. Bravo. And I too have felt this way  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)


First__Knight
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4 posted 01-16-2000 11:25 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

This is very nice.....you need to write more poetry


 Drive it like you stole it...LOL And another thing...When I rev my engine I want people to think the world is coming to a end....hehehe


Denise
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5 posted 01-16-2000 11:34 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Great poem, Marilyn....I too can relate!

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~

Alwye
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In the space between moments


6 posted 01-16-2000 11:45 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

I've felt like this a lot lately...but I'm starting to feel the beauty again.    Wonderfully done, Marilyn.  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha

Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


7 posted 01-17-2000 12:58 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

The beauty is within you my friend, and within this poem!
Anne
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8 posted 01-17-2000 01:14 AM       View Profile for Anne   Email Anne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Anne

Wonderfully articulated!  
Justbleu
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9 posted 01-17-2000 01:20 AM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

If only to feel the beauty within that we do outside!!  I can relate to this feeling, I want to feel and see that kind of beauty again within me!!
I liked this very much!!
Nicely done!!

Take Care
Bridgette
devina
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10 posted 01-17-2000 04:45 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Look inside Marilyn, the inner beauty is there as well, and I'm sure you'll find it soon enough!!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
hoot_owl_rn
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11 posted 01-17-2000 04:05 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Oh hun, this is a beautifully written poem, but yet I find it so sad. There is so much beauty within you, that you add to the beauty outside. I know how you feel though and I guess that's what saddens me the most.
(((HUGS)))
Marilyn
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12 posted 01-17-2000 04:12 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Astrea......Thankyou. :0

Rebecca....Yes it is funny how that works, even as hard as we try to feel it inside.

Isis...Thanks Sister. It is a different style for me. I think it likes me much.  

Sir Knight...Thakyou and I shall try.  

Denise...Thankyou.

Krista...I am glad that you are beginning to feel the beauty again. You are much to young to be enshrouded within yourself. Chin up my friend.  

Chris....:0 you always know how to make me blush. *giggle*

Anne...Thankyou so very much.  

Justblue.....I am very happy you could relate to this piece. Unfortunately many of us know all to well these feelings.

devina....I do not feel this way at present but I have been there. I think it all comes out in our writting when it is time and this pieces time had come.

Ruth...you snuck in there on me friend...lol. This is not from my present situation but from feelings I have had in the past. It was just it's time to be written.


[This message has been edited by Marilyn (edited 01-17-2000).]
Martie
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13 posted 01-17-2000 04:35 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

You have written your feelings well here--I'm glad they are past feelings.  Sometimes it takes time before the words can form that match the feelings.  
Severn
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14 posted 01-18-2000 05:47 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Marilyn...this is a pleasure to read. I loved it!

K
Elizabeth Santos
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15 posted 01-18-2000 06:43 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Somehow, I knew when I opened this, it would be a good poem, Just lovely
Liz
tracie66
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16 posted 01-18-2000 07:31 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

intense.....a fantastic poem

 
Marilyn
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17 posted 01-18-2000 05:40 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Martie...Thankyou...I too am glad they are past feelings, although they do creep up again from time to time.

Severn...So very glad you enjoyed it my friend.  

Liz...A wonderful compliment from such a talented poet. Thankyou so very much.

tracie....Thankyou for your comment, it is very much appreciated.
Dark Angel
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18 posted 01-18-2000 05:45 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Marilyn, very beautiful this is and yet so sad. beautifully written!!

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Munda
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19 posted 01-18-2000 07:16 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

Very nice poem Marilyn ! Though I'm glad those feelings belong to the past. : )
Tamera
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20 posted 01-18-2000 07:56 PM       View Profile for Tamera   Email Tamera   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tamera

I am so glad these feelings are past, not present. Beauty surrounds us each day, it is too bad we cannot feel that inside each day. I can relate to this wonderful poem!  
Tamera
hoot_owl_rn
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21 posted 01-18-2000 10:16 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Marilyn....I didn't think it was possible to improve on this wonderful piece of poetry, but with the change in presentation, you have proved me wrong and done so. Beautiful, well written work  
Majestic
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22 posted 01-18-2000 10:28 PM       View Profile for Majestic   Email Majestic   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Majestic

This is truly beautifully written..But dang it's sad....I'm glad it does not apply to you ....or, especially me!...
Echo Rhayne
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23 posted 01-18-2000 11:51 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

WoW

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~


Marilyn
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24 posted 01-19-2000 08:35 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Dark angel...Thankyou for the compliment. They are past but from time to time they still creep up. I think it is like anything else in life, we live it as it comes.

Munda....thanks for you kudos

Tamera....There is a peacful glory to the world. Not to be able to revel in it on a daily basis is such a shame.

Ruth my friend, thankyou for your help while I played with this time and time again. Finding finally that your suggestion worked the best for me...lol. You know mw so well. ((hugs))

Majestic...I too am glad it does not apply to you. Unfortunately it did apply to me at a point in my life. There are still times when this creeps in and I have to push it out with all I have.

Echo....I am not sure how to reply to your wow..except the humblest of thankyou's.
 
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