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Of Death (a paradelle, which I blame entirely on Nan's sadistic streak LOL)

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Skyfyre
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0 posted 01-16-2000 03:22 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Skyfyre

In wisps of mist, of woven dream
In wisps of mist, of woven dream
Lost spirits walk in quiet grace
Lost spirits walk in quiet grace
In dream, lost wisps of spirits grace
In woven mist of quiet walk.

Of silence made the hanging shroud
Of silence made the hanging shroud
Fear fades the living into death
Fear fades the living into death
The living death-shroud fades into
The hanging silence made of fear

The wanting swallowed in the numb
The wanting swallowed in the numb
Dark hopes by shadow fingers claimed
Dark hopes by shadow fingers claimed
The wanting claimed by swallowed hopes
Numb fingers shadow in the dark

In woven shroud of hanging mist
The spirits' wisps in silence dream
Numb quiet fades, swallowed by fear
Into dark fingers wanting death
In grace the living walk, of hopes,
Of shadow made: the lost the claimed.


 You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

© Copyright 2000 Linda Anderson - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 01-16-2000 03:54 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

You do love challenging forms, eh, Kess?! Of course, this is excellent!  

 Denise

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Whose winnings are less than his worth;
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Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~

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2 posted 01-16-2000 04:01 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Youe words are perfectly geared for this poetic style. Very nice, Kess.
Nan
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3 posted 01-16-2000 04:12 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

SADISTIC she says????

Now, I've been rightly accused of being sarcastic, sardonic, and sometimes even caustic..... But sadistic?????? Li'l ole me????

What else could I challenge you with - after those merrily loony double sestina's???

Oh - Nice job, btw...
HelmutB
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4 posted 01-16-2000 04:37 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Surely a nice piece you,ve written
Words so well in line
Love it
and i see the challagnes aren't over yet  

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Ted Reynolds
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5 posted 01-16-2000 08:53 PM       View Profile for Ted Reynolds   Email Ted Reynolds   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ted Reynolds

What a fine experience you give me with this piece . . . no, two intertwined experiences.  You present me with a verse form new to me which I would consider almost unachievable, as well as a sample of it which I must consider almost unsurpassable.  Bravo!
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6 posted 01-16-2000 10:27 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Poor Nan gets blamed with everything!!LOL  This was great Kess, brilliant and yes SADISTIC!

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7 posted 01-17-2000 01:05 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Actually, I know for a fact that Kess IS sadistic!   hehe
But her words ring brilliantly when challenged. Is there nought you cannot do my friend? And do exceedingly well at that?
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8 posted 01-17-2000 11:54 AM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Wonderful Kess!  I don't know what muse you've found lately, but don't let it go!!  Your writing has indeed been the best that I have ever seen it. . . perhaps Nan is your muse?  

And Nan, I wouldn't say that you're sadistic, but. . .

I think that this might warrant a form challenge!  Anybody with me?

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

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I am also unfamiliar with this poetic form, but after reading this excellent piece of writing...I know I'd like to see more...
This is wonderful Skyfyre

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
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10 posted 01-17-2000 02:45 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

I enjoyed this very much, thanks!

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


Michael
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11 posted 01-17-2000 03:07 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

I must say I am in awe.  Love the form and content.  What a creation.  

Michael
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12 posted 01-17-2000 03:39 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Applauds!!! Excellent work, so true to form  
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