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Of Death (a paradelle, which I blame entirely on Nan's sadistic streak LOL) |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap 
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In wisps of mist, of woven dream In wisps of mist, of woven dream Lost spirits walk in quiet grace Lost spirits walk in quiet grace In dream, lost wisps of spirits grace In woven mist of quiet walk. Of silence made the hanging shroud Of silence made the hanging shroud Fear fades the living into death Fear fades the living into death The living death-shroud fades into The hanging silence made of fear The wanting swallowed in the numb The wanting swallowed in the numb Dark hopes by shadow fingers claimed Dark hopes by shadow fingers claimed The wanting claimed by swallowed hopes Numb fingers shadow in the dark In woven shroud of hanging mist The spirits' wisps in silence dream Numb quiet fades, swallowed by fear Into dark fingers wanting death In grace the living walk, of hopes, Of shadow made: the lost – the claimed. You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You do love challenging forms, eh, Kess?! Of course, this is excellent!  Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Youe words are perfectly geared for this poetic style. Very nice, Kess. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
SADISTIC she says???? Now, I've been rightly accused of being sarcastic, sardonic, and sometimes even caustic..... But sadistic?????? Li'l ole me???? What else could I challenge you with - after those merrily loony double sestina's??? Oh - Nice job, btw... |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Surely a nice piece you,ve written Words so well in line Love it and i see the challagnes aren't over yet The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
What a fine experience you give me with this piece . . . no, two intertwined experiences. You present me with a verse form new to me which I would consider almost unachievable, as well as a sample of it which I must consider almost unsurpassable. Bravo! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Poor Nan gets blamed with everything!!LOL This was great Kess, brilliant and yes SADISTIC! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Actually, I know for a fact that Kess IS sadistic!  heheBut her words ring brilliantly when challenged. Is there nought you cannot do my friend? And do exceedingly well at that? |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderful Kess! I don't know what muse you've found lately, but don't let it go!! Your writing has indeed been the best that I have ever seen it. . . perhaps Nan is your muse? And Nan, I wouldn't say that you're sadistic, but. . . I think that this might warrant a form challenge! Anybody with me? --------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I am also unfamiliar with this poetic form, but after reading this excellent piece of writing...I know I'd like to see more... This is wonderful Skyfyre A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I enjoyed this very much, thanks! Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I must say I am in awe. Love the form and content. What a creation. Michael |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Applauds!!! Excellent work, so true to form |
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