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Her presence

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Nate Dogg
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0 posted 01-16-2000 02:40 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

There was this one girl I saw at the Orland Arena who was raking up autographs from all the famous Orlando Magic players. Cindy Crawford didn't have anything on this girl. And that's why this poem is dedicated to that girl because she was flat out all that! Anyways, I hope y'll like the poem.


The moment she walked in,
her presence locked in.
I've never seen a girl so beautiful before.
On a scale of one to ten, I give her a twenty-four!
With her creamy brown skin, that beautiful face,
and that hour-glass figure,
she had me feigning for her,
like a bottle of liquor!
Everyone in the room had their jaws dropped,
as this girl shimmied around,
with her silky halter top.
I wanted to get with her real bad
and I would give it all I had,
to get her attention,
so that I could dwell in her lovely dimension.
Yes, her presence,
is all in the beauty of essence.
Baby got back and she's all that and more,
that's why she's got me open like a sweat pore.
If she was mine,
I would treat her divine.
She would never leave my side
and she'll be there till the day I die.
And even when I die,
she'll still be mine
because eventually, I'll see her in heaven.
And once again, our love will ring hearts and roses,
with a smile of encouragement from God,
and a heart-touching comment from Moses.


 Nathan
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Denise
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1 posted 01-16-2000 03:41 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

She really got your attention, huh, Nate!!?
    Great poem!!  

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 01-16-2000 03:46 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Nate,
She got your attention and you got my attention. Enjoyed the read.
Rus Bowden
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3 posted 01-16-2000 04:37 PM       View Profile for Rus Bowden   Email Rus Bowden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rus Bowden

Hi Nate,

A whole life and eternity with a woman only seen.  Ah, how can women do this?

Rus
Marge Tindal
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4 posted 01-16-2000 10:17 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Ah, the mystery of woman.
Nate, this is just wonderful.
Guess you'll go back to the O-Rena, huh?
Now ... that's MAGIC !
~*Marge*~


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devina
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5 posted 01-16-2000 10:22 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Sounds like you got it real bad Nate...Me thinks you should find her and GET IT ON!!!G*

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
whiskey
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6 posted 01-17-2000 04:33 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

I agree with devina, You should go find her and get you some   Great poem
Elizabeth Santos
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7 posted 01-17-2000 04:40 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Hmmmm, Reminds me of Raffaello Benelli,
Maybe it's his sister
Liz
hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 01-17-2000 11:43 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Hmmm...certainly made an impression did she  
Echo Rhayne
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9 posted 01-18-2000 03:53 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

She caught your eye
you can't deny
you want to try
to get her

I'll take a shot
but hope its not
just what she's got
on the outside

You never know
its funny though
what if it was Toe
in drag

OK so that was MAJORLY korny but who cares LoL, great poem!


 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~


Nate Dogg
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Georgia, Fulton


10 posted 01-18-2000 10:09 AM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Thank you Dysnder for the nice comment.
Thank you Seymour for the nice comment.
Thank you Rus for the nice comment.
Hey Rus, I guess I just let my imagination run away.
Hey Marge, you darn right it's magic.
Hey Devina, I agree wholeheartedly and thanks for the post.
The same for you too Devina and thanks for the post.
Thanks Liz, for the post.
Thank you Hoot, for the post.
Thank you for the funny post, Echo!
I knew that it couldn't be Toerag because Toerag is a guy.
I admit that I didn't know if he was a guy or not until one of the fellow poets told me.
Thank you all for responding to the poem.
I admit that I'm shocked over all the posts that I got though.

 Nathan
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