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-spinning songs to the clouds-
Rain is a dream.
A pebblespotted waterflow of emerald wash.
Imagine it bathing the mountains, the hillsides;
Glistening scrub, melted freeways.
Out here in California, it hardly ever rains.

The sky is touched by the crowns of palms.
There aren't many clouds, but a vastless vastness.
Reflections on mirrored facades pouring reflections,
Painting in abstract, earthless perfection.

And, while driving to work, another traffic knot,
I sing in my car to the radio's wishes,
Spinning notes and soul to the sky,
To become in time a cloud.

A lonesome, beautiful reminder of ambition
To make it beyond what's just in view.
Never stopping to fear its eventual poetry:

Burning off, losing small and larger pieces,
Writing out names in temporary contrails.
A final cotton thread over a shadowless sea.

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Astraea
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1 posted 01-16-2000 04:04 AM       View Profile for Astraea   Email Astraea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Astraea

Wow...  Very nice, and lots of strong words...  And a reference to CA [and I want rain here!  This state needs a little more variety in the weather!].  Me like.  Very lovely.

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

Poet deVine
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2 posted 01-17-2000 08:29 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I like your use of imagery here! Good one.
Justbleu
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3 posted 01-17-2000 09:36 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

I enjoyed this very much...nice imagery!!

Take Care
Bridgette
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4 posted 01-17-2000 11:26 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Glad you all liked it. And Astraea, be careful what you wish for. It's been pouring here aaaalll day.
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Nice imagery and there's nothing wrong with rain  
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6 posted 01-19-2000 01:27 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

I agree, hoot_owl. Unforunately, Californians CANNOT drive in the rain. There's double the accidents on the freeways. And natives will readily admit this (when they're busy not lurching into airbags, that is   ).

Mike
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7 posted 01-19-2000 02:09 AM       View Profile for SnglDad   Email SnglDad   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SnglDad

Very well written bsquirrel.
And I have to agree, there is nothing wrong with rain,unless you live here in Seattle.
You`ve done a great job at giving other`s a
Vision of the California Hywys.
Thanx For Sharing and God Bless

                              Joel
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8 posted 05-22-2002 07:19 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Ooo, the poem that was my tagline for a bi'. And a new question comes t' laht -- why am ah so bored that ah'm replying to ancient posts? oh, right -- shirkin' work!

Such a poet ah am.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

 
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