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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores 
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One Shattered Heart ~Marge Tindal~ A heart is surely breaking. Did you hear the pieces fall? Shattering into slivers against the bedroom wall. Fragments of the broken heart strewn across the floor. No time for consoling glances as you walked out the door. You may not choose to look at the damage you have caused, surely you would have heard the sound of this heart breaking if you had paused. Left of this woman, one empty shell. No longer able to survive in this hell. When you broke this heart you broke my spirit too. I cannot make the pieces fit into the person I was for you. Such a misfit, broken puzzle now lays upon the ground. It can't put it back together, for the pieces can't be found. How do you mend a broken heart? Chances are, that you aren't able for it shattered with such a force, only a new love could make it stable. For now one shattered heart lies stately in repose, Waiting for one special man, the man who knows just how to mend this broken heart. *For a friend going through a really bad experience. ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Hi, Marge. I definitely enjoyed this poem. You take the phrase "breaking your heart" and give it literal meaning with the focused, inventive imagery. There were two places where the flow was broken when you tried to cram too many syllables into a line, but that's something easily fixed. Great work! Mike |
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SnglDad Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 115Seattle area |
This threw me off a lil,after reading your poem "I want a love like this" I was thinking,wow that didn`t last long. I can feel for your friend and at the same time Im glad it wasn`t you. Hope this reads right? Thanx again for sharing  |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
A lovely piece of work. Truly so. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Yes, you describe it perfectly. I've had one of those before Good work, Marge, I'm sure your friend will appreciate this Love ya, Liz |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Inspirational and well written The feelings are well shown here As always a very nice poem Marge The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Anybody breaks your heart, Marge, he's gonna have 1000 Passionate poets after his butt!!  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
bsquirrel- Thanks for the read. Glad you enjoyed. SnglDad- Joel, thank you for your concern. A lot of what I write is written with other people in mind. I always say, 'thank God I don't have to live it all to write about it.' And, it 'read' just right. Astraea- Thank you, dear. Elizabeth, my friend- I know your heart and I know you've helped many too. Helmut Becker- Thank you so much for liking the things I write. Means a lot to me. Balladeer- Awwwww ! You say the nicest things. 'Don't Go Breaking My Heart' Love ya' ... ~Me~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Well-written poem Marge. It was very descript too! Nathan |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Beautifully done as always Marge--I'm so glad your heart is intact. The heart that breaks can only mend from inside out before you send it out to make another try make sure your strength is not a lie. In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Well done, Marge. And I too am glad it's not about you! Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Nathan- Thank you. I always enjoy reading the 'descriptive' things you write also. Martie- Really enjoyed your little 'missive'. Very true ... but, we never do that, do we? Always looking for Bandaids to put over the cracks aren't we? Hmmmmmm? Inspiration ! ! ! Denise- So very glad you liked it too. I believe that everything someone else goes through eventually could become something we experience. I try to envision what they are going through. Love ~Marge~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Beautiful poem, Marge! You painted a vivid picture here! I too, am glad it isn't you! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Rosemary- I value your opinions on what I write. As I told you before ... you and Dale write the most BEAUTIFUL poetry that I so greatly admire. I feel fortunate to have run into you both through the Passion's pages. Thank you, my friend(s). ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Beautiful poem. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Vivid images of your heart shattering!! I like how this was written!! Beautiful!! Take Care Bridgette |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Vandana- Thank you, dear. Enjoy having you read and comment. Keep writing ! ~*Marge*~ JustBleu- What a perfect delight to have you back visiting with us. Thank you for liking my poetry. I'm glad your day is brightened. Love ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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