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One Shattered Heart

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Marge Tindal
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One Shattered Heart
~Marge Tindal~

A heart is surely breaking.
Did you hear the pieces fall?
Shattering into slivers
against the bedroom wall.

Fragments of the broken heart
strewn across the floor.
No time for consoling glances
as you walked out the door.

You may not choose to look
at the damage you have caused,
surely you would have heard the sound
of this heart breaking if you had paused.

Left of this woman,
one empty shell.
No longer able to
survive in this hell.

When you broke this heart
you broke my spirit too.
I cannot make the pieces fit
into the person I was for you.

Such a misfit, broken puzzle
now lays upon the ground.
It can't put it back together,
for the pieces can't be found.

How do you mend a broken heart?
Chances are, that you aren't able
for it shattered with such a force,
only a new love could make it stable.

For now one shattered heart
lies stately in repose,
Waiting for one special man,
the man who knows
just how to mend
this broken heart.



*For a friend going through a really
bad experience.




 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

© Copyright 2000 Marge Tindal - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 01-16-2000 03:08 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Hi, Marge.

I definitely enjoyed this poem. You take the phrase "breaking your heart" and give it literal meaning with the focused, inventive imagery. There were two places where the flow was broken when you tried to cram too many syllables into a line, but that's something easily fixed. Great work!

Mike
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2 posted 01-16-2000 03:14 AM       View Profile for SnglDad   Email SnglDad   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SnglDad

This threw me off a lil,after reading your poem "I want a love like this"
I was thinking,wow that didn`t last long.
I can feel for your friend and at the same time Im glad it wasn`t you.
Hope this reads right?
Thanx again for sharing  
Astraea
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3 posted 01-16-2000 03:56 AM       View Profile for Astraea   Email Astraea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Astraea

A lovely piece of work.  Truly so.

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 01-16-2000 06:27 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Yes, you describe it perfectly. I've had one of those before
Good work, Marge, I'm sure your friend will appreciate this
Love ya,
Liz
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5 posted 01-16-2000 01:24 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Inspirational and well written
The feelings are well shown here
As always a very nice poem Marge


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

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Anybody breaks your heart, Marge, he's gonna have 1000 Passionate poets after his butt!!  
Marge Tindal
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bsquirrel-
Thanks for the read.  Glad you enjoyed.

SnglDad-
Joel, thank you for your concern.
A lot of what I write is written with
other people in mind.  I always say,
'thank God I don't have to live it all
to write about it.'
And, it 'read' just right.

Astraea-
Thank you, dear.

Elizabeth, my friend-
I know your heart and I know
you've helped many too.

Helmut Becker-
Thank you so much for liking the
things I write.  Means a lot to me.

Balladeer-
Awwwww !  You say the nicest things.
'Don't Go Breaking My Heart'
Love ya' ... ~Me~

 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

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8 posted 01-16-2000 02:23 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Well-written poem Marge. It was very descript too!

 Nathan
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Beautifully done as always Marge--I'm so glad your heart is intact.

The heart that breaks can only mend
from inside out before you send
it out to make another try
make sure your strength is not a lie.

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
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Well done, Marge. And I too am glad it's not about you!  

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~

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Nathan-
Thank you.  I always enjoy reading
the 'descriptive' things you write also.

Martie-
Really enjoyed your little 'missive'.
Very true ... but, we never do that, do we?
Always looking for Bandaids to put over the cracks aren't we?
Hmmmmmm?  Inspiration ! ! !

Denise-
So very glad you liked it too.
I believe that everything someone else
goes through eventually could become
something we experience.  I try to envision
what they are going through.

Love ~Marge~

 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

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Beautiful poem, Marge!  You painted a vivid picture here!  I too, am glad it isn't you!
Marge Tindal
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Rosemary-

I value your opinions on what I write.
As I told you before ... you and Dale write the most BEAUTIFUL poetry that I so greatly admire.

I feel fortunate to have run into you both through the Passion's pages.
Thank you, my friend(s).
~*Marge*~

 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

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Beautiful poem.
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Vivid images of your heart shattering!! I like how this was written!!  Beautiful!!

Take Care
Bridgette
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Vandana-
Thank you, dear.
Enjoy having you read and comment.
Keep writing !
~*Marge*~

JustBleu-
What a perfect delight to have
you back visiting with us.
Thank you for liking my poetry.
I'm glad your day is brightened.
Love ~*Marge*~

 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

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