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Teardrops

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Lynn Burdette
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0 posted 01-15-2000 09:45 PM       View Profile for Lynn Burdette   Email Lynn Burdette   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lynn Burdette

Teardrops
by:Lynn Burdette

Teardrops, teardrops in my eye,
softly flowing as we say good-bye.
You reach and touch the tear as it falls
And kiss my lips as I stand tall.
Trying not to show my pain,
I whisper softly your sweet name.

Teardrops, teardrops in my eye,
softly flowing as we say good-bye.
My face is wet and my heart is blue.
The pain inside, if you only knew.
I smile a fake smile as I look at your face.
I know my memories cannot be replaced.

Teardrops, teardrops in my eye,
Softly flowing as we say good-bye.
Please hurry and go for I cannot contain
the teardrops that fall they fall like rain.
As I watch you leave, I wave to you
and hope these teardrops turn to dew.

Teardrops, teardrops in my eye,
Softly flowing as we say good-bye.




 Lynn Burdette
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Astraea
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1 posted 01-15-2000 09:49 PM       View Profile for Astraea   Email Astraea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Astraea

Wow...reminds me of a lot of memories...  Very lovely.

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

Paul Hoekman
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2 posted 01-15-2000 09:51 PM       View Profile for Paul Hoekman   Email Paul Hoekman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Paul Hoekman's Home Page   View IP for Paul Hoekman

This is precious
so very sweet
thanks again
a real treat
Earthman
Rus Bowden
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3 posted 01-16-2000 12:43 AM       View Profile for Rus Bowden   Email Rus Bowden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rus Bowden

Hi Lynn,

Great use of refrain, so simple and moving.

Rus
CrazyChick
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4 posted 01-16-2000 12:55 AM       View Profile for CrazyChick   Email CrazyChick   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CrazyChick

Great work,  well written !!!
Artur Hawkwing
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5 posted 01-16-2000 01:14 AM       View Profile for Artur Hawkwing   Email Artur Hawkwing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artur Hawkwing

I give you two thumbs up on this one. The way you portray your emotions is lovely.
Elizabeth Santos
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6 posted 01-16-2000 07:09 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

I could feel the fake smile, I think I smiled that way before
Good poem, I loved it
Liz
John Yaws
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7 posted 01-16-2000 09:45 AM       View Profile for John Yaws   Email John Yaws   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit John Yaws's Home Page   View IP for John Yaws

Ditto, to the above. A very bitter-sweet rendition of memory.
vandana
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8 posted 01-16-2000 11:19 AM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

I like your poem very much.What a lovely poem.Keep it up.
Nate Dogg
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9 posted 01-16-2000 02:18 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Great poem and very moving!

 Nathan
gary marshall
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10 posted 01-16-2000 02:59 PM       View Profile for gary marshall   Email gary marshall   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for gary marshall

Very lovely poem, enjoyed it very much.
Denise
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11 posted 01-16-2000 03:49 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Beautiful, Lynn and I love the use of the repetition. So many teardrops....

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~

Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 01-16-2000 03:57 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Lynn,
Enjoyed the read.
Justbleu
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13 posted 01-16-2000 09:12 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

I really liked the sing songiness to this!!  I thought it was very pretty!!  I liked and enjoyed this very much!!  It was sooo sad, and similar to how I've felt before!!

Take Care,

Bridgette
Marge Tindal
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14 posted 01-16-2000 09:31 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Lynn-

This is a beautifully written piece.
The flow is rhymic and lyrically lovely.
By golly, I think I like it very much.
~*Marge*~

 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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First__Knight
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15 posted 01-16-2000 10:14 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

So simple and direct....feelings flow here like the tears.  Very nice

 Drive it like you stole it...LOL

Lynn Burdette
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16 posted 01-24-2000 10:20 PM       View Profile for Lynn Burdette   Email Lynn Burdette   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lynn Burdette

I want to thank each and everyone of you for your nice replies. It really is encouraging to hear such great comments from all of you.
I hope you all continue to enjoy all of my poems. Everything that I write comes straight from my heart and is a experience that I have had sometime in my life. Thanks again everyone!
Lynn Burdette
One Who Understands
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17 posted 01-25-2000 01:09 AM       View Profile for One Who Understands   Email One Who Understands   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for One Who Understands

Very beautiful

and comforting to the teardrops in my eyes!
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