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LRAW
Junior Member
since 1999-11-06
Posts 15


0 posted 2000-01-15 08:47 PM


A Friendly Gift

Give me a Knife
Or maybe a gun
Speak to me slowly
Or I will run
Cover me up
And pretend I'm not there
Feel me shout
And breath all my air

Hello again
you thought I was dead
Maybe I am
but we are still friends
Yes we are still friends

Tuesday was just
a prelude to truth
When I broke our mirror
Hate ran right through
the cracks of our pit
and blackness set in
covered your mind
time ate all your skin

I was so scared
when you ended my life
I turned all the wheels
and the lights shined so bright
I ripped out my eyes
so I could see straight
You blanketed the sun
in the name fate

Hello again
You thought I was dead
Maybe I am
But we are still friends
Yes we are still friends

© Copyright 2000 LRAW - All Rights Reserved
Astraea
Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378
California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now
1 posted 2000-01-15 09:30 PM


Wow.  I don't know what it was that hit me so hard with this, but wow.  Lovely poem.

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."


Rus Bowden
Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 139

2 posted 2000-01-16 12:21 PM


Hi LRAW,

What a speaker you have chosen for this!  Inventive and haunting.

Rus

LenMcC1
Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 68

3 posted 2000-01-16 11:33 PM


Well done!
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