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Wake me before I Fall
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Wake me before I Fall |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Wake Me Before I Fall The resonance was soft a muted call of desire trill it did into the silence of sleep a lover’s insistent sigh far and away it ebbed then closer ‘til my breast warmed hearken not to this embrace my fear proclaimed me lost down travesty you’ll slide and any turn might wrench the safety of this warm place where dwelling is forever my ancient tear was new again and patterned by a great regret that trod in memories darkest den and pulled forth light that wishes made Oh sleep me quiet still I say across the chasm heaving still with bliss abandon let me stay your breath for wisdom let me drown in profound bliss so wept by tears I am too open for this call to break and blunder drawn a poison like the honeyed vision of you lit and longing for me stakes my heart into this pillow Wake me love for I am lost and dreams are daring me fast hold my wealth inside your heart light kiss me open onto your dear and gentle listen dispel that lover’s insistent sigh Wake me before I fall In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful, Martie....so beautiful!!  Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I can only smile at how easy you make it look. Wonderful writing. |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
This is so good Marti , You do it easily , Wonderful poem |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
No rhyme, no meter, and yet it's music Wonderful writing Liz |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie - Very lovely .. a tenderness that sighs. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
Beautiful. Another lovely piece of art. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I like it.... Balladeer's right - You do make it look easy... |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This free verse of words I travel is a path that comes from a place I never plan--it just is there, banging on the door and I have the key, when unlocked out it comes. Thank you all for such thoughtful and kind comments. In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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Rus Bowden Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 139 |
Hi Martie, I love the way you have worked the language including choosing no punctuation. The effect is perfect. Super poem. Enjoyed. Rus |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Martie, you make this look far too simple |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Rus--I have been enjoying your poetry too. Thanks for reading this one. Ruth--Thankyou. Sometimes the things that are easy are the hardest and the things that seem the hardest are easy. |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
So beautiful...definitely music to the ear, Martie.. *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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