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Falling Awake

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Meadowmuse
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Falling Awake



Soft shadows on the window's sill
as daylight's drawn a ragged breath
Low calling of the whippoorwill
first signs of spring amidst scents of death

Finely fragrant, as dogwood teases
the moistened morning's vision
Succintly savors and somehow sees
o'er the nearing apparition

Draw nigh, come forth lost labouring soul,
encumber not Perdition
Unburden the sallow, ponderous load
swelling full with each confession

Lilt lightly upward, newly borne,
all grace and tenderness bestowing
Embrace the cockcrow, the sudden morn...
your Freedom's come with Knowing.


Dear LadyClaire



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1 posted 01-15-2000 03:43 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Delightful.
The title drew me in ...
what a subtle play on words.
Then, slowly I was awakened
by the imagery.

Wonderful, Claire.
MeadowMuse at play.

~*Marge*~

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2 posted 01-15-2000 03:47 PM       View Profile for Artur Hawkwing   Email Artur Hawkwing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artur Hawkwing

I feel very priveleged to be reading this. Of beauty and enchantment it spoke. Spring is easy to welcome, for it is a venerable season. At least I hope I understood if this is what you intended to write about.
Meadowmuse
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3 posted 01-15-2000 05:38 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Marge...Thanks for reading...so glad you enjoyed it.

Artur...thank you. I can understand your visioning of Spring as it does have elements of springtide references. I wrote this actually as an expression of beginning life toward a different light, in the midst of grief, mostly as a reassurance to myself that I could persevere...a springtide of my own, perhaps? Thank you for your kind comments.

Claire
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Freedom comes with knowing--what true words Claire.  This poem was so lovely, I went back to read it out loud because the words just sounded so good.

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
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5 posted 01-15-2000 06:29 PM       View Profile for merely_a_jester   Email merely_a_jester   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for merely_a_jester

first off, i like the title
second off, i love the words
i tip my cap

merely_a_jester
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6 posted 01-15-2000 07:30 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Martie...I love poetry read aloud, and I am honored that you felt inclined to read mine. Thank you for letting me know that you enjoyed it.

jester...gee, thanks!

Claire
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Clarie this is beautiful such wonderful imagery , You awakened me this morning with a lovely poem  
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Oh, how true..."Your freedom's come with Knowing". Beautiful and well done, Claire!

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~

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Another lovely one.

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

Elizabeth Santos
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10 posted 01-15-2000 09:41 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

meadowmuse, I thought this poem was about a child being born. Your thoughts at times are just slightly elusive and make for any number of interpretations. I love that quality. Now I'm off to read again knowing your thoughts in writing it
It is so lovely, as is all of your poetry
Liz
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Whiskey, Denise, Astraea, Liz...thank you, all, for your kind responses...you folks are awfully nice.

Liz...I'm afraid a lot of my work is vague and/or elusive, but I try to temper it with as much "normalcy" as possible...lol Thanks for reading  

Dear LadyClaire


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12 posted 01-16-2000 08:49 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I have to agree that the title got my attention... and the poem kept it... Very nicely done, Claire - I'm enjoying your work lots...
Rus Bowden
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Hi Claire,

I read this on an dya when it does me good.  Thank you. Love your care with words, seasons, nature and scents.  Super poem.

Rus
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Meadow,
Good job, well done, enjoyed the read.
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Wonderful read, Meadow, love the flow and sentiment.
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16 posted 01-16-2000 04:23 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Feels like a kiss from the muse
If my German word "Muse" is the same in English
Enchanting and inviting poesy
Well the words..catching breath
Loved the presentaion of the poem
Thank you
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Feels like a kiss from the muse
If my German word "Muse" is the same in English
Enchanting and inviting poesy
Well the words..catching breath
Loved the presentaion of the poem
Thank you
The two replies where unintentionally but the poem is worth it in any way   ups


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.  



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RobertB
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18 posted 01-16-2000 10:47 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

An excellent poem!!! Very nice.

Robert
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Oh wow, this is so lovely Meadowmuse.  I love how your poetry can be intrepreted in so many ways..it makes it all the more appealing.  Truly beautiful work.  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha

Anne
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You are so talented!!!  I adore this one!
Meadowmuse
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Thank you, all, for your very kind and encouraging comments. I'm glad there was something about this poem that you enjoyed.  

Dear LadyClaire


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Lovely! Such beautiful imagery!
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I'm not in with all the proper terms for criticing poems. But I must say that I am always amazed at how you weave your words together. Another very wonderfull poem.

Parker
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Poet deVine...Thank you, so glad you liked this one.  

Parker...Thank you for letting me know what you thought of this. I appreciate your comments, and as long as you say what you mean, then you're doing just fine, to my way of thinking!  

Dear LadyClaire


 
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