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whiskey
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0 posted 2000-01-15 10:03 AM


" Things You Do "

Loud Noise
I do hear
Every time
You are near
I think its my heart
Beating so Strong
Trying to sing you a passionate song

Floating empty
I feel inside
Every time
Your by my side
I think its my tummy
Rumbling about
To get you attention
Its trying to shout

Fizziness flowing
I feel it inside
Everytime
That you walk by
I think its my blood
Pumping quickley through
Trying to tell you of the love for you



© Copyright 2000 Julie Nelson - All Rights Reserved
LngJhnAg
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1 posted 2000-01-15 10:08 AM


Hi there, Whiskey-girl.  It appears you are going through those ol' feelings again.  Good for you!  I hope this love is THE love.  As for those rumblings... well, take it from me, a chilidog with onions is NOT a good dinner idea when there's to be a walk in the moonlight.  Hugs to you, lil one.  I love your poem.
Nate Dogg
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2 posted 2000-01-15 12:27 PM


Lovely poem, Whiskey!

 Nathan

HelmutB
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3 posted 2000-01-15 04:13 PM


The signs are clear as i can see
Yes in love is she
Good for you to feel this way
Perhaps that is what your doctor will also say
Well written and in such style
Glad you wrote such Love Lullaby



 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


whiskey
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4 posted 2000-01-15 07:20 PM


Thanks guys for your nice replies  
Rus Bowden
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5 posted 2000-01-15 10:07 PM


hi whiskey,

you brought those feelings out so well in this poem.  nice work.  enjoyed, very much.

rus

Astraea
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6 posted 2000-01-15 10:13 PM


whiskey, again, another lovely poem.  Haven't been disappointed yet with your writing and I doubt I ever will [which is a good thing!].  Very nice.  Feelings like that are always nice.

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."


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