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merely_a_jester Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 67Arkansas... that's all you get |
sighs and sits and stares silent seeking sense senseless love life emptyness closes in forgotten forlorn |
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amber Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 240los banos, ca, |
I see this is your first post here at passions, congratulations on the display of emotions here. I know what it is like sometimes when your feeling so much and it all just starts to run together, even the meaningless things. Welcome and i enjoyed your poem. |
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merely_a_jester Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 67Arkansas... that's all you get |
though you may not care, the title was cut off for those interested, the full title is as follows sitting alone depressed lonely and wonder pondering the meaning and wishing for substance unannounced unknown with an absent selfrighteous attitude thank you for your time merely_a_jester |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
welcome to passions... i love the title  and i think the aspect of the poem that makes it more than a list of words is the alliteration throughout... you dont see alliteration much anymore (not since the early periods of middle english literature) and whether it was intentional or unintentional in this work, i think it aides in giving solidity to a short and simple work...  sincerely, **jerome the boy whose brain got left out in the rain and nobody bothered to dry it off when they put it back in |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I loved your style with this one! Welcome to passions, you've entered quite nicely! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
I enjoyed the poem BUT a poem with a title that is longer than the poem itself? what about:Hopeless or Where did the light go? Welcome to the family Earthman |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
The title line only has a limited amount of space...welcome to Passions! |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
This is good , great title , welcome to passions  |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Mr. Jester - "merely" does not do justice to you - Your poem requires the reader to think about what he's reading - I like that - I seldom think about anything - lol. Welcome to the Forum. Watch out for Toerag, he's a rascal and a scalawag. And Balladeer is, too. The only person you can trust in here is me *wink*. I think you will find this board to be one of the most supportive and warm places to be. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Love that alliterative assonance.... Welcome... ...and don't listen to these guys... You can trust some people here... I'm sure of it...  |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
A welcome first...to you I liked what I read written by you I felt like being a Sequester Very nice and this is just_a_jester The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Wow, that was neat! A title longer than the poem, very unique. Hope to see more of your poetry! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
It is as though you opened your heart and the words simply spilled...a pure and poetic outpouring. I thank and welcome you.  Claire |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
May I extend my Welcome too! I enjoyed this piece and look forward to reading more from you... A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Merely_a_Jester- I like substance that makes me think. Thus, I like this. Quite clever. And thank you for posting the entire title. Made it even more interesting. Welcome to Passions. ~Marge~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Welcome to Passions! Lovely poem...says so much with so few words! Check your email for a special welcome! Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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merely_a_jester Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 67Arkansas... that's all you get |
thank you for the kind comments everyone merely_a_jester |
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Rus Bowden Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 139 |
hi merely_a_jester, a love of words you've displayed in this. i would enjoy reading more of your work. btw, i'm new here too. seems like a great place with fabulous people. rus |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
The title pulled me in that's for sure...but it is so long, longer than the poem! But, nevertheless, it's a stonr, lovely poem indeed. Welcome to Passions ~Asraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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