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sitting alone depressed lonely and wonder pondering the meaning and wishing for subst

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merely_a_jester
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Arkansas... that's all you get


0 posted 01-15-2000 04:13 AM       View Profile for merely_a_jester   Email merely_a_jester   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for merely_a_jester

sighs
and sits
and stares
silent
seeking sense
senseless

love
life
emptyness
closes in

forgotten
forlorn

© Copyright 2000 merely_a_jester - All Rights Reserved
amber
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los banos, ca,


1 posted 01-15-2000 04:17 AM       View Profile for amber   Email amber   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for amber

I see this is your first post here at passions, congratulations on the display of emotions here. I know what it is like sometimes when your feeling so much and it all just starts to run together, even the meaningless things. Welcome and i enjoyed your poem.
merely_a_jester
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Arkansas... that's all you get


2 posted 01-15-2000 04:19 AM       View Profile for merely_a_jester   Email merely_a_jester   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for merely_a_jester

though you may not care, the title was cut off
for those interested, the full title is as follows

sitting alone depressed lonely and wonder pondering the meaning and wishing for substance unannounced unknown with an absent selfrighteous attitude

thank you for your time

merely_a_jester
poetry_kills
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3 posted 01-15-2000 04:41 AM       View Profile for poetry_kills   Email poetry_kills   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit poetry_kills's Home Page   View IP for poetry_kills

welcome to passions... i love the title   and i think the aspect of the poem that makes it more than a list of words is the alliteration throughout... you dont see alliteration much anymore (not since the early periods of middle english literature) and whether it was intentional or unintentional in this work, i think it aides in giving solidity to a short and simple work...  

sincerely,

 **jerome the boy whose brain got left out in the rain and nobody bothered to dry it off when they put it back in
devina
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4 posted 01-15-2000 05:21 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

I loved your style with this one!  Welcome to passions, you've entered quite nicely!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Paul Hoekman
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5 posted 01-15-2000 07:54 AM       View Profile for Paul Hoekman   Email Paul Hoekman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Paul Hoekman's Home Page   View IP for Paul Hoekman

I enjoyed the poem BUT
a poem with a title that is longer than
the poem itself?
what about:Hopeless or                    Where did the light go?

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6 posted 01-15-2000 09:12 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

The title line only has a limited amount of space...welcome to Passions!
whiskey
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7 posted 01-15-2000 09:33 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

This is good , great title , welcome to passions
LngJhnAg
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8 posted 01-15-2000 09:43 AM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Mr. Jester - "merely" does not do justice to you - Your poem requires the reader to think about what he's reading - I like that - I seldom think about anything - lol.

Welcome to the Forum.  Watch out for Toerag, he's a rascal and a scalawag.  And Balladeer is, too.  The only person you can trust in here is me *wink*.  I think you will find this board to be one of the most supportive and warm places to be.
Nan
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9 posted 01-15-2000 09:51 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Love that alliterative assonance....
Welcome...
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HelmutB
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10 posted 01-15-2000 10:30 AM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

A welcome first...to you
I liked what I read written by you
I felt like being a Sequester
Very nice and this is just_a_jester


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Songbird
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11 posted 01-15-2000 01:40 PM       View Profile for Songbird   Email Songbird   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Songbird's Home Page   View IP for Songbird

Wow, that was neat! A title longer than the poem, very unique. Hope to see more of your poetry!
Meadowmuse
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It is as though you opened your heart and the words simply spilled...a pure and poetic outpouring. I thank and welcome you.
Dear LadyClaire

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May I extend my Welcome too!
I enjoyed this piece and look forward to reading more from you...

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon


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14 posted 01-15-2000 02:49 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Merely_a_Jester-

I like substance that makes me think.
Thus, I like this.
Quite clever.
And thank you for posting the entire title.
Made it even more interesting.
Welcome to Passions.
~Marge~

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Denise
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15 posted 01-15-2000 04:15 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Welcome to Passions! Lovely poem...says so much with so few words! Check your email for a special welcome!

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~


merely_a_jester
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Arkansas... that's all you get


16 posted 01-15-2000 06:28 PM       View Profile for merely_a_jester   Email merely_a_jester   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for merely_a_jester

thank you for the kind comments everyone

merely_a_jester
Rus Bowden
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17 posted 01-15-2000 09:40 PM       View Profile for Rus Bowden   Email Rus Bowden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rus Bowden

hi merely_a_jester,

a love of words you've displayed in this.  i would enjoy reading more of your work.

btw, i'm new here too.  seems like a great place with fabulous people.

rus
Astraea
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18 posted 01-15-2000 09:51 PM       View Profile for Astraea   Email Astraea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Astraea

The title pulled me in that's for sure...but it is so long, longer than the poem!  But, nevertheless, it's a stonr, lovely poem indeed.  Welcome to Passions

~Asraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

 
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