Member Rara Avis
Hi Stephen. I definitely liked the rhythm and flow of this, but it's very vague. It seems like it would be the chorus sung again and again in a song. But, without the supporting verses around the chorus, it's very open-ended and hard to relate to. I mean, I understand you want your friendship back, but a million questions are asked in the process> What was this friendship? Who was it with? What made it "real?" How was it lost? Granted, poems are about brevity, but this seems more like a promising start, not a full-on poem.