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Wendy Flora
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0 posted 2000-01-12 03:14 PM


(I'm sorry for the hyphenated "cage-ed", but this
stupid computer doesn't do stress marks, so I had to
improvise) -wen

I see a cage-ed tree
Amid a field of asphalt
Limbs skyward stretch to free
As if to heaven could vault
Yet at its feet, an iron gate
Will not allow it out
Holding back, it keeps it straight
With sorrow, rage, and doubt
For if this tree could leave its chain
Traverse the cold, hard pavement
'Twould cry and flail its boughs in pain
For this desparing enslavement.

© Copyright 2000 Wendy Flora - All Rights Reserved
Majestic
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1 posted 2000-01-12 06:32 PM


this really made me stop and think....thanks...great job...
Danny Holloway
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2 posted 2000-01-18 05:28 PM


How sad the caged tree, alive in the aspalt jungle.  Nice Poem.
DH

 

Martie
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3 posted 2000-01-18 05:35 PM


Sad how sometimes we take the natural out of nature.  

I'm glad to take a fragile stem
and plant it in my backyards glen
in hopes that it will try to fly
and change the view I have of sky

Enjoyed your poem very much!

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)

Denise
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4 posted 2000-01-18 05:38 PM


Very enjoyable poem, Wendy!

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~


Wendy Flora
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5 posted 2000-01-18 07:39 PM


Thanks you all.  I had actually forgotten I'd posted this one.   -wen
Eloise
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6 posted 2000-01-18 07:47 PM


Excellent poem Wendy.  
Echo Rhayne
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7 posted 2000-01-18 11:17 PM


Exquisite!

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~



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8 posted 2000-01-18 11:36 PM


I am a child of the mountains and moved to the city only to return to the mountains I love so much. I loved this poem! My kids see trees that are free. SEA
hoot_owl_rn
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9 posted 2000-01-18 11:52 PM


What a well written poem and so true of todays world  
HelmutB
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10 posted 2000-01-19 12:23 PM


Short but sweet and true
Very nice and I feel for the tree

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


Wendy Flora
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11 posted 2000-01-19 12:42 PM


I wrote this while I was sitting in the car waiting for someone in the K-Mart parking lot.  Personally, it's not one of my favorites, but from the response, it must not suck as much as I originally thought.   Thank you, all.   love, wen
Nan
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12 posted 2000-01-19 07:46 AM


LOL - I never quite thought of it from the tree's point of view.. I'll never look at a "K-Mart" tree the same way again .. Nice job, Wendy...
Paul Hoekman
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13 posted 2000-01-20 12:16 PM


This one is growing on me He, He, He.
It always strikes me funny
when and the types of places
that poems or a concept
will POP into your head.
From my landscaper
point of view
I do believe that tree
was enraged.

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