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spiked
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Hammond, La USA

0 posted 2000-01-14 04:25 PM


I feel the passing of lights.
As I glide across the night
flowing across the stars
in this darkness of unknown.
I see not what I have left,
only that which is before me
not controlling my direction
only watching as it passes me by.
In delightment I see an end to my pain
This dream of control and disdain
only to reach what I thought was the end.
To start all over again.


 Richard Rendall

© Copyright 2000 Richard Rendall - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2000-01-14 04:32 PM


Spiked,
So true and you said it well. Enjoyed the read.

Rus Bowden
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2 posted 2000-01-14 04:57 PM


hi spiked,

oh what a dream, both hopeful, soaring, and healing, then painful once again, but always soaring.  love this metaphor.

rus

Denise
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3 posted 2000-01-14 05:54 PM


I enjoyed this, Spike! Well done!  

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~



Michael
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4 posted 2000-01-14 06:18 PM


It's like being on a rollercoaster and the operator went on a coffe break....Somebody get me off this thing....LOL  Good poem, spiked, I can truly relate.


Michael

spiked
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA
5 posted 2000-01-14 08:39 PM


Thank You all.
Feels good to finally write and be read by such wonderful writers who understand.
Will use this as a release to my writing needs for now on.
Again thanks

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