How to Join Member's Area Private Library Search Today's Topics p Login
Main Forums Discussion Tech Talk Mature Content Archives
   Nav Win
 Archives
 Open Poetry #5 Archive
 I care about you
 1 2 3 4
Follow us on Facebook

 This is an Archive. You may post a reply, but new topics are not allowed.

 
User Options
Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Admin Print Send ECard
Passions in Poetry

I care about you (a.k.a. The Young Ash Tree)

 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
Poertree
Senior Member
since 11-05-1999
Posts 1413
UK


0 posted 01-14-2000 12:37 PM       View Profile for Poertree   Email Poertree   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Poertree

Seventeen years on you are still young.
Seventeen years I watched you bud, unfurl and shoot your defiance into cruel skies.
Seventeen years, in each,  I saw you shrivel, blacken and seem to die.

Drab and dull you were to start,
Unassuming, slow to push your space in the world,
Crowded, dazzled, choked by frothy fashionable Prunus pinking their silliness in your dour face.

But look at them now greyly bleeding away their old age in the shadow of your vigour,
Briefly flaunting faded sameness against your new crisp green.

And even the Great Storm (3 years ago),
Which stripped and tore your limbs,
Couldn't wrench your deep fought roots.

True; you bled.  I bled too
watching for three days through distorted panes, the same reflected in you.

And on the third day in the calm you still stood; weak but strong.

~

Each year now about this time I gently rub the ringed anniversary scar
And, marvelling, trace the hardening growth beyond,
I know that one day, soon, you'll gently and discreetly flower,
To broadcast to the world the little helicopter seeds of your beauty and power.




[This message has been edited by Poertree (edited 01-14-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Poertree - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis
since 11-08-1999
Posts 9405
Pennsylvania


1 posted 01-14-2000 12:57 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Oh, this is a sweet poem! I love the little "helicopter seeds".
Wonderful!
Liz
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 08-22-99
Posts 23002


2 posted 01-14-2000 03:56 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Sounds like a beautiful tree! I also liked the 'helicopter seeds'! Very nice!

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~


Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 07-17-99
Posts 8273


3 posted 01-18-2000 05:38 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Phillip - well, can't go on and on here like you know I want to!!

But - I love this - it is slowly moving - like the growth of a tree and it is heavy and ripe in its power.

I am impressed - and love the intro lines.
Keep them coming dear friend.

K
hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 07-05-99
Posts 11105
Glen Hope, PA USA


4 posted 01-18-2000 06:54 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Philip...I absolutely love it!! You see, free verse is poetry after all   I'll tell you what, were all students as good as some I've met here, there would be no need for classrooms!! Wonderful job my friend  
Poertree will be notified of replies
 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
All times are ET (US) Top
  User Options
>> Archives >> Open Poetry #5 >> I care about you Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Print Send ECard

 

pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Today's Topics | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary



© Passions in Poetry and netpoets.com 1998-2013
All Poetry and Prose is copyrighted by the individual authors