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The Colors of YOU - A villanelle

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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 01-14-2000 11:38 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

The Colors of You

Like prisms hidden in a drop of dew
Unseen by human eye in morning light
Oh, how I love the colors that are you

A rainbow mist of every single hue
Reflect the very essence you invite
Like prisms hidden in a drop of dew

Serenity reflected in the blue
Integrity in alabaster white
Oh, how I love the colors that are you

In shades of gold your friendship pure and true
In crimson red, your passionate delight
Like prisms hidden in a drop of dew

Reflected in your eyes your spirit's hue
Is enveloped in aura whitest white
Oh, how I love the colors that are you

So many different tones are showing through
Your rainbow arc becomes my very light
Like prisms hidden in a drop of dew
Oh, how I love the colors that are you

Elizabeth Santos
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1 posted 01-14-2000 11:55 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

I've seen those very prisms, Elizabeth, and you've captured the spectrum quite well.  Thank you!

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


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2 posted 01-14-2000 12:00 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Liz,....(sigh)....
I love this poem....
Please check your email....


 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
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Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 01-14-2000 12:04 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Elizabeth,
Oh how I love the wit of you,
You glisten like that drop of dew.
You wave your words a Princess wand,
And I a frog upon your pond.
But place a kiss on his deadpan.
And perhaps he'll turn into a man?
Love Ya Sy
Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 01-14-2000 12:33 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sunshine,
Thank you for the kind comment. I have really been enjoying your poetry
Liz

Pepper,
Thanks for your comments and your e-mail. I'll write you in a minute
My kitchen suddenly got swamped with hungy mouths
Thanks, Pepper
Liz

Sy,
Glad you liked the poetry
But certainly no frog I see
But 'tis a poet writing lines
Of rainbow dreams and love sublime
Thanks for your little verse
LOve ya,
Liz
Rus Bowden
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5 posted 01-14-2000 12:40 PM       View Profile for Rus Bowden   Email Rus Bowden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rus Bowden

Hi Liz,

Oh how I love a villanelle!  Not so easy a form to do well, but you've done this so right.  Beautifully chosen end rhymes.  Very nice.

Rus
Michael
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6 posted 01-14-2000 12:42 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Exceptional poem Liz. Wow! - definately on my favorites list.


Michael
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7 posted 01-14-2000 12:44 PM       View Profile for Poertree   Email Poertree   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poertree

Elizabeth

I know how difficult these things are ..

This was exceptional .. thank you

Philip
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8 posted 01-14-2000 12:45 PM       View Profile for spiked   Email spiked   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spiked

Very well written.
Loved the use of of the spectrum and the breaking it down for comparison.
Elizabeth Santos
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Rus,
Thank you for those comments. I don't find it hard to rhyme a villanelle, but I find it hard for it to make sense, and this one says what I wanted it to say
Liz

Michael, What a compliment! Thank you!
Liz

Poertree, Not as hard as that darn sestina. I like the villanelle because it sounds like a song. Thank you

Spiked,
Thank you very much. I'm glad you liked it
Liz
HelmutB
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10 posted 01-14-2000 01:10 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Well done there I should say
I have never tried to write this way
Don't know if I could do
Such wonderful piece like this one of you
I take my hut bend in my knee
well done I say has thee


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

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11 posted 01-14-2000 01:17 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Elizabeth, my friend-

The villanelle
you do so well ..
the spectrum of light
hits me just right.

Lovely,

 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Denise
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You haven't written anything yet that is not excellently done. And now another wonderful villanelle! Very beutiful, Elizabeth!

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~


Skyfyre
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13 posted 01-14-2000 03:11 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

A flawless villanelle, and a mighty fine poem in its own right as well.  Thank you for an excellent read Elizabeth.

--Kess


 You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

Elizabeth Santos
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14 posted 01-14-2000 03:22 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Helmut,
Thanks for the poetic response. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.
Liz

Marge, Thanks, dear, A new road for me, these villanelles.
It's fun
Love ya, Liz

Denise, You should try this you would right a very beautiful one,
Thanks,
Liz

Kess, From a poet such as you, this is a greatly appreciated compliment, for I do so admire your work. Seems like you have a background in poetry, true?
Thank you so much,
Liz
Meadowmuse
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15 posted 01-14-2000 03:37 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse


Liz, this is so pretty a rhyme. Villanelle is an often difficult form to write convincingly, but you've done so, and splendidly...good work!

Dear LadyClaire

 
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