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The Colors of YOU - A villanelle
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The Colors of YOU - A villanelle |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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The Colors of You Like prisms hidden in a drop of dew Unseen by human eye in morning light Oh, how I love the colors that are you A rainbow mist of every single hue Reflect the very essence you invite Like prisms hidden in a drop of dew Serenity reflected in the blue Integrity in alabaster white Oh, how I love the colors that are you In shades of gold your friendship pure and true In crimson red, your passionate delight Like prisms hidden in a drop of dew Reflected in your eyes your spirit's hue Is enveloped in aura whitest white Oh, how I love the colors that are you So many different tones are showing through Your rainbow arc becomes my very light Like prisms hidden in a drop of dew Oh, how I love the colors that are you Elizabeth Santos |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I've seen those very prisms, Elizabeth, and you've captured the spectrum quite well. Thank you! Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Liz,....(sigh).... I love this poem.... Please check your email.... A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Oh how I love the wit of you, You glisten like that drop of dew. You wave your words a Princess wand, And I a frog upon your pond. But place a kiss on his deadpan. And perhaps he'll turn into a man? Love Ya Sy |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sunshine, Thank you for the kind comment. I have really been enjoying your poetry Liz Pepper, Thanks for your comments and your e-mail. I'll write you in a minute My kitchen suddenly got swamped with hungy mouths Thanks, Pepper Liz Sy, Glad you liked the poetry But certainly no frog I see But 'tis a poet writing lines Of rainbow dreams and love sublime Thanks for your little verse LOve ya, Liz |
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Rus Bowden Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 139 |
Hi Liz, Oh how I love a villanelle! Not so easy a form to do well, but you've done this so right. Beautifully chosen end rhymes. Very nice. Rus |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Exceptional poem Liz. Wow! - definately on my favorites list. Michael |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Elizabeth I know how difficult these things are .. This was exceptional .. thank you Philip |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Very well written. Loved the use of of the spectrum and the breaking it down for comparison. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Rus, Thank you for those comments. I don't find it hard to rhyme a villanelle, but I find it hard for it to make sense, and this one says what I wanted it to say Liz Michael, What a compliment! Thank you! Liz Poertree, Not as hard as that darn sestina. I like the villanelle because it sounds like a song. Thank you Spiked, Thank you very much. I'm glad you liked it Liz |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Well done there I should say I have never tried to write this way Don't know if I could do Such wonderful piece like this one of you I take my hut bend in my knee well done I say has thee The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth, my friend- The villanelle you do so well .. the spectrum of light hits me just right. Lovely, ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You haven't written anything yet that is not excellently done. And now another wonderful villanelle! Very beutiful, Elizabeth! Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
A flawless villanelle, and a mighty fine poem in its own right as well. Thank you for an excellent read Elizabeth. --Kess You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Helmut, Thanks for the poetic response. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Liz Marge, Thanks, dear, A new road for me, these villanelles. It's fun Love ya, Liz Denise, You should try this you would right a very beautiful one, Thanks, Liz Kess, From a poet such as you, this is a greatly appreciated compliment, for I do so admire your work. Seems like you have a background in poetry, true? Thank you so much, Liz |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Liz, this is so pretty a rhyme. Villanelle is an often difficult form to write convincingly, but you've done so, and splendidly...good work!  Claire |
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