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Poet deVine
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0 posted 2000-01-14 12:07 PM



Raffaello Benelli moved in down the street
Dark brown eyes and a smile so sweet
Driving a red convertible Ferrari
Dressed like he just came home from safari

I stood in baggy shorts, garden hose in my hand,
Staring like a fool, just watering the sand!
The moving truck pulled in front of the house
Just then I noticed the stain on my blouse

All his furniture was leather and chrome
Sleek sofa and chairs, such a manly home!
I ran in the house to ‘put on my face’
Determined he wouldn’t see my casual disgrace

I decided to welcome him to our thoroughfare
And find out if he had a Mrs. somewhere
But just as I entered his front yard
He stormed out the door, breathing hard

Swearing in Italian, I guess it was that,
Pulling on a leather jacket and baseball cap
His jacket said ‘Black Eagle’ on the back
And he pulled leather gloves from a black leather pack

I started to speak, and he looked in my eyes
It was all I could do to breathe in quick sighs
The man was an angel sent here from heaven
On a scale of one to five, he was a seven!

He took my hand and told me his name
I blurted out ‘I love you!’ to my great shame
He smiled softly and patted my arm
And jumped in his car with a look of alarm.

Perhaps you’ll think I’ve learned from this
That I don’t dream of ‘our’ first kiss
But I’ve always been a dreamer you see
So I’ll always dream of Raffaello Benelli


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WhtDove
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1 posted 2000-01-14 12:37 PM


Devine this one got me laughing....at the get go!  Great poem! And dream away my friend!  

 <*\\\><
Where there is faith,
there is love.
Where there is love,
there is peace.
Where there is peace,
there is GOD.
Where there is GOD,
there is no need.

Hallmark



Nan
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2 posted 2000-01-14 07:33 AM


Well..... Have you offered him your home made lazagna yet????
Elizabeth Santos
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3 posted 2000-01-14 07:36 AM


He was probably a terrible kisser. I don't think you should waste too much time dreaming.
Funny, funny poem
Liz

Rus Bowden
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4 posted 2000-01-14 07:47 AM


Hi Poet deVine,

Sometimes the greatest muses come from having fun!  In this one, you have written a vivid scene so very well.  A big smile   for me this morning.

Now, I'm going furniture shopping.

Rus

Poet deVine
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5 posted 2000-01-14 08:37 AM


Thank you all! Nan, if it says Stouffer's i can cook it! Note to Rus: don't buy leather and chrome..get something soft and cushy!

Inspiration! When this gets more responses, I'll let you in on where this specific inspiration came from (you may be surprised!)..until then...  


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6 posted 2000-01-14 11:07 AM


This was funny and a well done treasure
but I'm not sure of that Italian pleasure.
My suggestion is keep the hose
it belongs to you and you know where it goes.

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)

Pepper
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7 posted 2000-01-14 11:37 AM


Wonderful PdV.....Still smiling here...and I can't wait to hear about the inspiration for this piece    


 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon



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8 posted 2000-01-14 11:52 AM


OK, time to 'fess up with the source of inspiration...and perspiration, probably...

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow



RainbowGirl
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9 posted 2000-01-14 12:40 PM


PDV: ROFL and he was 7????....WOW!

HUSG

Elizabeth: ROFL@He was probably a terrible kisser...and worse still, how do you tell someone you don't like feeling like you're being swallowed..*g*

HUGS

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.


RainbowGirl
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10 posted 2000-01-14 12:42 PM


PDV: ROFL and he was 7????....WOW!

HUSG

Elizabeth: ROFL@He was probably a terrible kisser...and worse still, how do you tell someone you don't like feeling like you're being swallowed..*g*

HUGS

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.


HelmutB
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11 posted 2000-01-14 12:50 PM


Yes Italians are a scream
And all you do....is dream
May you say "Hey, badabumbadabing"
How about some "East Site Mario's" dinner swing
With all that leather, chrome and car
He is better of then I by far
Especially He has your dream
While I can only sit and scream (laugh, that is)

Thanks for the lol    
Well done




[This message has been edited by HelmutB (edited 01-14-2000).]

Skyfyre
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12 posted 2000-01-14 02:06 PM


(giggling uncontrollably)  

What a hoot!  (oops, wrong poet)

I mean, this was deVine!  

--Kess


 You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.


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13 posted 2000-01-14 02:14 PM


You had me laughing too, now tell us.....what was the inspiration for this fantasically funny piece?!  

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~



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14 posted 2000-01-14 02:56 PM


ROFL... I love this, PDV!! *S* Dream on!
Elizabeth Santos
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15 posted 2000-01-14 03:12 PM


I'm getting more and more curious about Rafaello. When I read the title, I thought he was some tenor I never heard of. But whether or not he is a good kisser, I'm still curious as to where the inspiration came from. And if HE's a good kisser.
Liz

Craig
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16 posted 2000-01-14 06:35 PM




This was bound to be an ‘Automatic’ success with me PDV , you’ve written a truly witty poem that I just ‘Barreled’ through chuckling all the way.

( Can you write one about the M1 Super 90??? )




Craig


 Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool:
But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet.



Pepper
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17 posted 2000-01-15 01:44 PM


Still very curious PdV....Come on now...time to tell all  


Poet deVine
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18 posted 2000-01-15 02:40 PM


Herein lies the true tale of inspiration behind this poem:

My good buddy Craig is shopping for a new shotgun (not a rifle, there is a difference I've been told   ) Well, the gun manufacturer is named Benelli! One of the style Craig was looking at was the Raffaello..I thought it was a cool combination...Another style is the Black Eagle - this is a nice rifle ..hm, er shotgun!  And the hose reference is to an act of bravery that Craig performed about a month ago..seems the house next to his was on fire...he ran outside, grabbed the garden hose, broke a window and put the fire out.. before the firemen got there... our own, quiet, poet Craig is a hero! So this poem was written with several references that only he understood until now.

Craig, if I've embarrassed you by the hero bit, I do apologize...but not too much...  

Meadowmuse
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19 posted 2000-01-15 02:57 PM




Poet dV, this is an exceptionally comedic piece! Liked it very much, and enjoyed the way you incorporated the references to Craig's shotgun shopping. Now, you say that with his hose he was putting OUT a fire???        

Dear LadyClaire


JamesMichael
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20 posted 2000-01-16 07:05 PM


Wonderfully interesting and funny.  Maybe someday he'll give you a ride in that red Ferrari.   James
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