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RainbowGirl
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0 posted 2000-01-13 06:05 PM


When you are in love
how does it leave you feeling
eyes smiling body dancing
lost in thought mind reeling

Always smiling always laughing
constantly giving and sharing
touching, reaching out
flowering, extending the caring

When you are in love
does your world seem right
find yourself daydreaming
feeling the fire in you ignite

Resenting time that takes you away
watching the hands turn on the clock
at a loss for words that convey
that between you, you are key and lock

When you are in love
you feel your partner's pain and sorrow
as though it were your own
working together to resolve it all tomorrow

Sharing thoughts like missiles find their target
locked on tight the course has now been set
you're sheltering in the eye of the storm
There's no going back - the two of you have met!

When you are in love - is that how you feel?

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 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.





[This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 01-13-2000).]

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Denise
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1 posted 2000-01-13 06:10 PM


Yep! I'd say that this a very good description! Beautiful poem, Cindy!  

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~



Isis
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2 posted 2000-01-13 06:38 PM


Yep that about sums it up!!  Wonderful RG  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)



Elizabeth Santos
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3 posted 2000-01-13 06:51 PM


The poet who wrote this has been in love. And you're right, once there, it's too late. A lovely poem about a lovely feeling
Excellent.
Liz

Nate Dogg
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4 posted 2000-01-13 07:56 PM


Nice poem, Rainbowgirl!

 Nathan

Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2000-01-13 08:17 PM


RainbowGirl-

You've been peeking at my DIARY !
Awesome thoughts lady.
~*Marge*~

 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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RainbowGirl
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6 posted 2000-01-13 09:11 PM


Denise: Well, I could have written pages...LOL

HUGS

Isis: Now if only love+love=love...*g*

HUGS

Elizabeth: Am I allowed to take the 5th?..

HUGS

Nate Dogg: Thank you..

HUGS

Marge: Inspiration is the key....is it one of those lovely old 5 year diaries with the golden lock?.. ..Faithfully I used to lock mine but why I don't know, so easy to break into...LOL

HUSG



 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.


Grandma Jo
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7 posted 2000-01-13 09:14 PM


Seems like someone's in love. Yes, it is like all this and more. This is lovely!  
Rus Bowden
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8 posted 2000-01-13 09:17 PM


Hi RainbowGirl,

I love how the question makes it seem as a first love, or a confirmation of loves existence in your speaker.  Wonderful to read.

Rus

RainbowGirl
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9 posted 2000-01-13 09:47 PM


Grandma Jo: I've always been in love - with life..  

HUGS

Rus: Clever..*g* But there's only one way to know you're in love: when you don't question how you feel - to quote, played on the soul, no saxophone!

HUGS

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 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.



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Baby Blue
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10 posted 2000-01-13 11:10 PM


What a wonderful poem!  They way you fit the words together are amazing.  You have perfectly described the way I feel about my "love".  I could never get it out on words, but you have already accomplished that.  Beautiful work.

Baby Blue

* He became what he hated,
But he loved what he became,
And he hated the fact that he loved it.

JTF
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11 posted 2000-01-14 04:52 AM


Beautiful poem sweetheart ... and ROFL @ you taking the 5th ... hey, don't steal my lines will ya ? ...  
devina
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Cali
12 posted 2000-01-14 05:24 AM


To answer your question Rainbow, yep, that's the feeling! Loved the poem!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

RainbowGirl
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13 posted 2000-01-14 01:07 PM


Baby Blue: Thank you...I could have written pages on it but you have to stop somehwere..LOL...Thank you.

HUGS

JTF: ROFL, hey, they're universal lines, can't be stolen...*g*

HUSG

Devina: Thanks...*g*

HUGS

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.


spiked
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14 posted 2000-01-14 03:03 PM


beautifuuly written. If only we could hold that euforia of new love and spread it out over time.
Pepper
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15 posted 2000-01-15 01:38 PM


Yes to your question Rainbow....
You've expressed the feeling so beautifully..


 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon



Artur Hawkwing
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since 1999-06-30
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16 posted 2000-01-15 04:17 PM


I can't tell, I'm still young. It speaks more of marriage-type kind of love, I suppose. Half of it speaks true though.

You said:
When you are in love
does your world seem right
find yourself daydreaming
feeling the fire in you ignite

I couldn't agree any more! Beautiful, beautiful poem that speaks directly.


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Dark Angel
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17 posted 2000-01-15 07:36 PM


Rainbow,yep this is the feeling, Excellent my dear friend!!

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



Nan
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18 posted 2000-01-16 08:40 AM


When you're in love.... your heart feels better... and your body and soul feel better as well.... Nice one, RG...
RainbowGirl
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19 posted 2000-01-17 09:05 AM


Spiked: You can keep it...if you're prepared to make loving fun as well as listening, sharing, being there and oh dear, best I stop now before I write a novel...but it takes two or else it falls apart..

HUGS

Pepper: Tis a lovely feeling..

HUSG

Arthur: Interesting thought about it seeming like a marriage..but you're right, that's how marriage should be..

HUGS

DA: Thanks sweetheart..

HUSG

Nan: Yep, medicine for the heart and soul..   All I need is the prescription filling..*g*

HUSG

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.


catslair
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20 posted 2000-01-17 09:19 AM


well i am new.......and in many ways old.........what i here is the thought of love......and am so glad if you have found something lasting like that.......my utmost blesings to you...for the words are warming to say the least..........
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