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Deb Lynne
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Where blue skies meet blue ocean

0 posted 2000-01-13 01:27 PM



When was the last time you made love to me
That there were just the two of us, not three?

When was the last time I felt your warm caress
And just the touch of you left me all a mess?

When was the last time you lovingly said my name
You said it with pride, not spoken with shame?

When was the last time you looked me in the eye
Made me laugh with joy, not stand there and cry?

When was the last time that you had time for me
Not making up excuses you had someone else to see?

When was the last time I felt comfortable in our home
When we were together, I wasn't spending time alone?

When was the last time our love meant something to you
I knew you'd be there no matter what we went through?

When was the last time you desired my touch and kiss?
I can't remember the last time; those times do not exist.


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2000-01-13 01:58 PM


And if this is reflective of YOUR life, you are leaving when?  I hope you find the happiness you deserve.

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow



suthern
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2 posted 2000-01-13 02:05 PM


Sad and so well done!!!
Michael
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3 posted 2000-01-13 02:23 PM


Wow!  Deep and poignant.  Can feel the emptiness in this one.


Michael

Denise
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4 posted 2000-01-13 06:17 PM


Very sad. I agree that is this about you, the time has come to leave. Sometimes that is the only thing to do, sad but ture. And there is life on the other side, yes there is.

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~



Deb Lynne
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Where blue skies meet blue ocean
5 posted 2000-01-13 08:16 PM


I promise all you wonderful people that this is NOT going on in my life or our house! I found Mr. Right in '97 & it's only getting better!  
Denise
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6 posted 2000-01-13 09:03 PM


Well, that's a relief! Glad this is not about you!  

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~



Grandma Jo
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7 posted 2000-01-13 09:08 PM


So very sad and touching, would be terrible to feel this way. I'm glad also that it is not about you. I hope it is not anyone you know either!  
Rus Bowden
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8 posted 2000-01-13 09:22 PM


Hi Deb,

Oh!  This is sad and did seem so true.  My eyes got wider as I read this from beginning to end, and your final line let this resound after the poem.

Rus

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Cali
9 posted 2000-01-14 03:25 AM


This one was very poignant indeed...glad to know it wasn't personally about you (was about to give you the "get up and go" speech!) Great poem!

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