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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Same Name A little far from recreation A bit of blues brings on the tears After all that we've discovered ain't it funny, we end up here High tides come in desperation making all else seem so cold For our time spent in Salvation Seems so funny, I'm feeling old We use to dance the slow song's And hold each other tight We use to hum the melody Deep into the night And where there were turtle doves We would glide in flight Where was it, this thing called distance When did it come about How could it hold the locks down And keep our loving hearts out Seems so simple as we stand here But the reality is so dim After all that we've been through, Do the feelings really end? Time can go on quickly When you don't take time to touch To give a simple hug or say, I love you oh so much And suddenly the years have swept, and noting looks the same The only thing you share together is the same last name I looked into a strangers eyes as I lay upon my bed And wonder what he sees in me what's going through his head Is there any longing left, a sigh of new desire Has the passion burned up in the flames just ashes in the fire I pray we wake in mornings light in the arms of someone near I hope that all that's laid to rest, will wash away the fears Let star dust fall up our brow And quickly breed desire, As we look into each others eyes And melt in passions fire tori 2000 I am I guess what you call the ear to most of my friends.. I feel their pain and listen to their sorrow's... this is for You.. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
tori, this reads as if it should be sung...very well presented. Melancholy, troubling, and all too familiar. Excellent.  Claire |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Sounds like many marriages I know, too. That's why a solid foundation of friendshop is soooooo very important in a marriage. The flames of passions can ebb and flow, but the bond of friendship is the anchor! Well done, Tori! Denise |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Arghhh...memories of the ex springing up all over in this one. Indeed, the only thing shared was a name. These feeling I know all to well...may you soon find something to fill the emptiness this poems spells out to me. Michael |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Tori this is a wonderful piece, and filled with so much truth. A sad truth it is... and I agree, it does read much like a song. Well done  It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Thanks Claire, Denise, Michael, and caroline For all the kind words on this one.. Claire I'll have to print this to show my son.. he thinks he's the only music writter in the family.. lol I wont print this part. he is..lol |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
I thought I might find you hear How are you dear. I am impressed by what I’ve read Read it twice..each single tread A song? Yes, possible I guess Nice to see you here and god bless May your day be as the brightest star on a clear southern night. The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Tori, sorry I missed this one! Boy I have had the same thoughts before. You sure are keen in listening and portraying how someone else is feeling... Beautifully done! <*\\\>< Where there is faith, there is love. Where there is love, there is peace. Where there is peace, there is GOD. Where there is GOD, there is no need. Hallmark |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Hey Helmut.. why thank ya there my friend. I'm glad you enjoyed .... |
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