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No Final Fate (DreamEvil & Severn)

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DreamEvil
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0 posted 01-13-2000 06:52 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Were I to die
would she shed a tear?
Therein lies the question
and passion's greatest fear
Answers wither away
beneath heated scrutiny
allowing logic sway
to interfere with affairs
best left to the heart
Though bereft of certainty
with reason
torn apart
each passing season
my own counsel do I keep
and for the loss of light I weep
Terror-quiet
breathing lost amid
the stalking of my fright
I see not
the author of my fear
but feel its kiss
perceive my mind
I am naked
alone with myself
and the horrors
of the lifely way
I smile and gaze
with guileless eyes
and inside bleeding dry
that cold stalking touch
comes only from
realising
     knowing
                   I
am alone
Loneliness croons
a softly seductive song
meant to lure and doom
those who revel in wrong
and entomb
crucified minds
with impure and fetid designs
and from the sorrow
of an aching
a desperation of loveless
sight
new fire brightly
colours over me
How to speak of lonely
when all is hued
with welcoming?
This alone-girl
hears and reaches
voices calling
slow throats soothing
her deafened mind
and she learns
alone
        is not
                 her final
fate...


©2000 DreamEvil & Severn


 Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©
-------------------------------------------------------
"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
(Marquis de Sade)


© Copyright 2000 DreamEvil - All Rights Reserved
Dark Angel
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1 posted 01-13-2000 06:59 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Soul-Brother and Butterfly, this is fantastic  you two, Love the words you put together, Its Brilliant!! loved it!!  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 01-13-2000 07:57 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

This is WONDERFUL! I love the ending of this poem because it is so true. I feel uncertainty pulling at one end and a sunbeam tugging at the other. You two obviously understand one another. How wonderful for two talents to write together this way
Liz

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 01-13-2000).]
hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 01-13-2000 09:41 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

What a nice duo you two make  
whiskey
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4 posted 01-13-2000 09:56 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

This is wonderful you two , so beautiful your words together  
caroline
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6 posted 01-13-2000 10:05 AM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

This gets a standing ovation from me! It is astoundingly beautiful, and ohhhh it definitely goes into my favorites file!
You two should do more collaborations...its a team that works!


 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


Denise
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7 posted 01-13-2000 11:02 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is beautiful, you guys! Excellent!

 Denise

Pepper
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8 posted 01-13-2000 12:29 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

A wonderful collaboration...
Beautiful work!


 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon


Michael
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9 posted 01-13-2000 01:25 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Oh joy - I can't honestly tell you the pleasure of seeing you two collaborate on a poem together.  

Michael
Skyfyre
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10 posted 01-13-2000 05:16 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

"a softly seductive song
meant to lure and doom
those who revel in wrong
and entomb
crucified minds
with impure and fetid designs..."

What a statement made here!  I cannot believe that the two of you did not receive more response to this ...

What I thought when I began reading this was nothing like the way it ended -- I love the twist in the final few lines!

Excellent work, both of you -- encore!  

--Kess


 You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

Martie
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11 posted 01-13-2000 06:25 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

How to speak of lonely
when all is hued with welcoming?

Oh, I love this line, the whole poem, wonderful!
RainbowGirl
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12 posted 01-13-2000 06:28 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Superb teamwork!

HUGS

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.

 
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